Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.
Nowadays, it has become clear that the television is an essential component of almost every household. All family members, young or old spend some time watching tv.? I believe that children, being unable to differentiate between what's right and what's wrong, and also easily affected by the surrounding environment, are most suceptible to tv shows and media. one may notice an increase in violence in our society since the evolution of media, this can be greatly attributed to spending an enormous time each day on screens.
It is well known that studies have confirmed the link between media content and the behaviour of children as young ones like to copy what they see. For example, a study study was conducted in 1992 among young children from age ten to fifteen to address the harmful effects of watching violent shows for a duration as low as thirty minutes a day. it was not baffling that children whom where exposed to aggressive views acted much differently than those subjected to peacefull and positive ones. The aggressiveness increased markedly among the ones who watched violent shows within one month.
While some may argue that there are other sources who may have a considerable amount of influence on children such as their peer groups and parental role models and siblings, it might be noted that peers and parents are not necessarily a source of violence. Moreover, on the contrary, they have usually a calming influence.
To conclude, in order to have a healthy society, reducing children's exposure to violence in media is mandatory and
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, for example, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1308.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 260.0 442.535393258 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03076923077 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66448258685 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.653846153846 0.4932671777 133% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2015430642 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.909090909 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63636363636 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283677885409 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858539735095 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665237318877 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162838492112 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029588530788 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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