It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only 3 days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work 5 days a week for shorter hours-TPO 30
Most people are of the view that having a three-day job with prolonged hours provides them with more free time. However, others prefer to work five days a week but shorter hours than the former group. As far as I am concerned, having a five-day job is far better in numerous ways. The ensuing essay will illustrate my standpoint.
First, a five-day job along with less time during the workday will result in more productive work because employees feel less tired. In this way, they can maintain their concentration on their occupation well. For example, in a recent nationwide survey, bosses who had both types of employees were questioned about which kind of work is more productive. About two-thirds of them answered that their employees did well, meaning that the number of faults they did significantly declined when they were asked to work five days instead of three days a week. Furthermore, they could cope with the difficulties in the job they confront in more creative ways, making it possible for their bosses to thrive in their businesses. This example shows that the fewer hours employees work, the more productive they become.
Another equally significant point is that this kind of job is less harmful to employees’ health which means that people have less work pressure each day, making them physically and mentally. For instance, five years ago, I worked for a company for just three days but with prolonged hours. Having spent a long period of time sitting on the chair and looking at the computer monitor, my eyes badly damaged and I had to wear glasses after that. Also, my back even hurt which caused me to undergo surgery. Moreover, working just three days, I realized that I could not deal with the heavy workload each day and as a result, I got stressed out, feeling a lot of mental pressure. After a while, I contracted mental diseases. Thus, had I not worked such long hours, I would have remained healthy.
To summarize, I believe that working five days a week with short hours rather than longer hours with three days is of more advantages for employees. This is because not only will the output of work rise but employees also can retain their healthy lifestyle. Therefore, I highly recommend that employers offer this kind of work for their staff.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 477, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'decline'
Suggestion: decline
...number of faults they did significantly declined when they were asked to work five days ...
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Line 5, column 316, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th prolonged hours. Having spent a long period of time sitting on the chair and looking at the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, third, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8443877551 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50479418492 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2379443747 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.95 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367753505731 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113694724719 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086411471017 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256311205183 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511744347217 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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