The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
To prepare young people for leadership in government, industry and different other fields, the sense of responsibility and cooperation should be developed. To be a good leader working together plays a majore role than having competition with one another. this makes the intitutuion to value the sense of cooperation more than competition in achieving the true self of a leader. first and foremost, before leading a government or industry , one should be competetnt enough to develop one's attitudes and the ability to work with others. if not, that leader would fail as nobody has the favour or the desire to go with that leadership. In most of the rebellions which were organized to bring back freedom to Sri Lanka and India by the foreign rule of british, the young generation were made to organize campagines against the british and its governance not alone but together. Not with a sense of competition to take the advantage from foriegn rule or the publicity of common people but with the common vision of saving the country's freedom and the rights of the people. Sir. Ponnambalam Ramanadan, D.S. Senanayake and different other leaders were prominent in the campaigne where everyone's hard work and dedication paid off. So it is important to instill the young generation with the environment to work together more than creating competition. Furthermore, with the moving world with the advancement of technology, the more we can do together overweights the individual contribution. In most of the tech companies in the world now moves towards the horizontal leadership rather than a vertical heirarchical leadership in the organizational structure. this is because they believe that brainstroming with different parties having different expertise can increase the value of the solution that they propose. this is also very much applicable in the field of research where the heads of the research groups and the undergraduate researcher have the same say within the lab where they should be thought to achieve together. if within the same lab, two members are competitiors they will not discover the best thing to take the first mover advantage. The competition between the two parties may arise different other problems which delay the success of the innovation. Therefore with the new culture introduced by the advancement in the world in different fields, it is important to motivate young people to work together to achieve success with the combined effort. Although one could argue that without competition we will not be able to find best alternatives and solutions as we have to have a sense of competition to work harder to achieve them. However the sense of competition induces a stress and a mental imbalance within the young generation where we will not be able to use thier power in playing leading roles for the future. this is what has happened in modern education system where even the parents are putting an extra effort on the students to reach the pinnacle surpassing their colleagues. but the importance of the achievement changes with how far we have travelled together helping each other. that is a characteristic of a good leader. Being a bossy, dictatorial leader will not make the success in any field because people will not work happily and they are not self motivated.Thus, in conclusion it can be expressed that "together we can achieve more" and "together we fall together we rise" are two key principles that should be thought to young people in preparing them for leadership more than competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2971.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 580.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1224137931 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94906563168 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465517241379 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 936.9 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3324826747 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.045454545 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3636363636 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.97078651685 20% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17891977956 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520145058744 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712283964712 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17891977956 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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