In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as valuable work experience.
Do you agree or disagree?
<p class="MsoNormal"> It is
commented that children should enjoy their life to performing lots of task like
playing, learning instead of doing labour work. A section of society perceive
that children should do some type of labour work which increase their work
experience. I completely disassociate myself from this point of view. I believe
that children do not need to take work experience since their childhood. Ideas enunciated
further in my discourse will support my point of view.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> Discussing
few points to prove my disagreement, the foremost one is that take education in
childhood is an imperative for children. Education plays an indispensable role
in life of human being. Basic knowledge and ability should be acquire by
children before join any work industry because advance work is not possible on
field without it. For instance, if any children start mechanical work in any
organisation he/she can not perform an excellent task as compare to knowledgeable
mechanical engineer. Thus, to become an expert in any field children should
focus on study instead of work.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> Additionally,
I also perceive that children have less ability to understand any paid work in work
field. I think this time is so early for children. Children should enjoy their
life in activity like playing, listening song, reading books rather than focus
on work. As well as, they have to learn good virtues, manners, discipline from
their parents and adult persons.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"> However,
a diminutive section of society tend to perceive that to do any work education
do not play main role. Children can learn much more in their life from work
experience rather than any books. To establish any huge business, enlightenment
of books is not necessary parameter and priority of it is at very low level.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="text-indent:36.0pt">In conclusion, doing work can
fetch a human good amount of experience and the so called benefits like being
responsible and mature. However, I strongly believe that children should be
made to learn at schools and universities before pushing them into real world.
More emphasis on the development of cognitive skills should be given rather
than gaining experience at a very tender age<o:p></o:p></p>
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun task seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of tasks'.
Suggestion: lots of tasks
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Suggestion: In
...Education plays an indispensable role in life of human being. Basic knowledge an...
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Message: Did you mean 'acquired'?
Suggestion: acquired
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Suggestion: Field
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Suggestion: Mechanical
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Suggestion: Experience
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Suggestion: Responsible
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Suggestion: Made
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Message: Did you mean 'Then'?
Suggestion: Then
...gnitive skills should be given rather than gaining experience at a very tender age...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 1615.20841683 154% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.90304709141 5.12529762239 135% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 11.8160472078 2.80592935109 421% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 109.614077991 49.4020404114 222% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 155.75 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 33.0 4.38176352705 753% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101236650997 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732511791761 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730019695305 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0569693207024 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750734192864 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.3 13.0946893788 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 23.04 12.4159519038 186% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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