Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Submitted by junjunh on Wed, 11/13/2019 - 04:08

These days, music has aroused people’s discussion. In the belief of some people, music is claimed as a good way to connect people regardless their cultures and ages. I take the view that this idea is fairly compelling except in several cases.

In my favor of advocating for this trend, there are a plethora of reasons and merits when applying this idea. First, since music is the most popular hobby which could satisfy the mood of humans; therefore, there are uncountable clubs or groups, which are establish for music lovers exchange information together. Underground music, for instance, has a large community that connects audiences and artists on over the world together. Moreover, fans of a particular band are prone to gather together and mention about artworks of their idols.

Second, by controlling the feelings of listeners, music could creat the spiritual connections between humans. In football, each team has its cheering song and whenever the song is played, it links everyone together no matter how old they are.

However, it is not necessarily appropriate in all situations. In Korean, recently, with the increasing development of entertainment industry, there have been some ongoing problems between the fan clubs. They not only assume that their idol is the best but dispute each other. Not only that, but they also fustigate artists they hate on the Internet that results in suicide of celebrities.

All in all, existing as minor drawbacks are, it will not prevent us from concluding that music plays a pivotal role in bringing people together. By doing so, the barrier between humankind will be removed.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'established'.
Suggestion: established
... uncountable clubs or groups, which are establish for music lovers exchange information t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18867924528 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69757218484 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656603773585 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9643107258 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6666666667 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201035204714 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577231754313 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671043667557 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103108548739 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825279435484 0.056905535591 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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