In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
The recommendation to the city government to devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities is based on weak and loosely connected arguments. The city goverment has already promised to devote money to cleaning up the river, and residents are certain to be pleased with this, however it does not imply that they are certain to want to swim, boat or fish in the river as is suggested. While residents have continuously complained about the stink and water quality of the river, there is no case made for them complaining about the lack of recreational facilities around the river.
As the city governement has decided to devoting money to cleaning up the river, this implies that the river is cleanable and it is the responsibility of the city goverment to maintain it. However it should be ascertained whether there are any enviromental factors which are effecting the river, such as being downstream of a factory which produces waste which flows into the river in which case the factory would be culpable. Additionally the river may be situated in an area which is high in sulfur or other smelly but natural compounds. The occurance of such factors would limit the ability of the city goverment to reduce the smell of the river, and should be ascertained before recommending that money is devoted to riverside facilities which may not even be popular after the clean up.
The nature of the survey given to the residents is unclear. Whilst Mason City residents list water sports as among their favourate recreational acitivites, it does not give the context in which they are among their favourate activities. It may be that when on holiday, it is a very common pastime to go boating or fishing, however when in the City, they may have little inclination to do that. Additionally, there may already be indoor facilities which meet some of the needs of water sports such as swiming, which provide a much more comfortable and peaceful setting to enjoy water sports as opposed to a river which runs through a city. In this case many residents would feel that riverside recreational facilities were suplerflous to their needs. In the situation of a survey, to many it may seem to hae little significance and would when given the opportunity express desideratum for additional facilities. However when it comes to actually using facilities, they are just as likely to continue using the options they habitually use. In addition to this, the weather the the city enjoys may not be suitable to using the river for water sports, no matter how often they do them whilst on holiday.
It is assumed that it is the responsibility of the city government to provide riverside recreational facilities. However if water sports are as popular as the survey suggests, this would be an ideal opportunity for an investor to provide and maintain facilities, giving it more attention and funding than the city government could do. This would be excellent for local business and would provide a higher quality of facilities increasing the chances of them being used by the residents.
The arguent given for the city governemnt devoting money to facilities which have no solid evidence as to why they may be used lacks any cogency. Further investigation into the weather, the source of the smell and the true inclination of residents to use facilities if they were to be made available must be undertaken before the recommentation can be taken seriously
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The city goverment has already promised to devote money to cleaning up the river, and residents are certain to be pleased with this, however it does not imply that they are certain to want to swim, boat or fish in the river as is suggested.
Error: goverment Suggestion: government
Sentence: As the city governement has decided to devoting money to cleaning up the river, this implies that the river is cleanable and it is the responsibility of the city goverment to maintain it.
Error: goverment Suggestion: government
Error: cleanable Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: governement Suggestion: government
Sentence: However it should be ascertained whether there are any enviromental factors which are effecting the river, such as being downstream of a factory which produces waste which flows into the river in which case the factory would be culpable.
Error: enviromental Suggestion: environmental
Sentence: Additionally the river may be situated in an area which is high in sulfur or other smelly but natural compounds.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The occurance of such factors would limit the ability of the city goverment to reduce the smell of the river, and should be ascertained before recommending that money is devoted to riverside facilities which may not even be popular after the clean up.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: goverment Suggestion: government
Error: occurance Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Whilst Mason City residents list water sports as among their favourate recreational acitivites, it does not give the context in which they are among their favourate activities.
Error: acitivites Suggestion: activities
Error: favourate Suggestion: favorite
Sentence: It may be that when on holiday, it is a very common pastime to go boating or fishing, however when in the City, they may have little inclination to do that.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Additionally, there may already be indoor facilities which meet some of the needs of water sports such as swiming, which provide a much more comfortable and peaceful setting to enjoy water sports as opposed to a river which runs through a city.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: swiming Suggestion: swimming
Sentence: In this case many residents would feel that riverside recreational facilities were suplerflous to their needs.
Error: suplerflous Suggestion: superfluous
Sentence: In the situation of a survey, to many it may seem to hae little significance and would when given the opportunity express desideratum for additional facilities.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: hae Suggestion: had
Sentence: In addition to this, the weather the the city enjoys may not be suitable to using the river for water sports, no matter how often they do them whilst on holiday.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: whilst Suggestion: while
Sentence: The arguent given for the city governemnt devoting money to facilities which have no solid evidence as to why they may be used lacks any cogency.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: cogency Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: arguent Suggestion: argument
Error: governemnt Suggestion: government
Sentence: Further investigation into the weather, the source of the smell and the true inclination of residents to use facilities if they were to be made available must be undertaken before the recommentation can be taken seriously
Error: recommentation Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 583 350
No. of Characters: 2833 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.914 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.859 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.777 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 148 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 79 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.194 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...city government to devote more money in this years budget to riverside recreational ...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...y of the city goverment to maintain it. However it should be ascertained whether there ...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...ich case the factory would be culpable. Additionally the river may be situated in an area wh...
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Line 9, column 459, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...already be indoor facilities which meet some of the needs of water sports such as swiming, ...
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Line 9, column 912, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... desideratum for additional facilities. However when it comes to actually using facilit...
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Line 9, column 1072, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...y use. In addition to this, the weather the the city enjoys may not be suitable to usin...
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Line 9, column 1072, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...y use. In addition to this, the weather the the city enjoys may not be suitable to usin...
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Line 13, column 114, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...vide riverside recreational facilities. However if water sports are as popular as the s...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, so, while, as to, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2895.0 2260.96107784 128% => OK
No of words: 583.0 441.139720559 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96569468268 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91379618374 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82620646084 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.413379073756 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 939.6 705.55239521 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.705028769 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.75 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.15 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267422394426 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987211195948 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643560535354 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160012797657 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05947697403 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.