In recent years，the pressures placed upon students in school and university is increasing and they are pushed to work hard from a young age. Do you think it is a positive or negative development？
Schools are considered as a place where the next generation gains knowledge and improve work skills. Because of the intensive competition in the job market，enormous pressures have been placed on young pupils. This essay will discuss why this trend has undesirable effects on teenagers.
It is true that the younger generation may benefit these stresses from school and university as it could help student improve their academic performance as well as employability. For example，driven by pressure，students may pay more attentions in science classes and conduct in experiments carefully. In this way，pupils are able to have a good grasp of advanced technology，thereby enhancing their abilities，such as critical thinking skill and analytical skills. When they enter the workforce，students will become more competitive because of the knowledge and skills acquired from school.
However，the argument above can be viewed from a different perspective as too much pressure can damage students’ personal development. Because of the stress from school，students may an excessive amount of time on school work instead of participating in extra-curricular activities，such as playing sports and hanging out with friends. With less interaction with peers， teenagers may fail to develop social skills and emotional intelligence. They may have difficulties in empathizing and communicating with the others when they grow up and this can adversely impact their career.
Moreover, increased stress can pose a strain on students’ mental health. Since the mentality of teenagers are immature, pupils may not efficiently handle pressure and workload. Therefore, students will experience more negative emotions, including anxiety, anger and depression, which damage their psychological development. Recent researches show that students who experience more stress are at higher risk at having mental disorders in adulthood.
In conclusion, I strongly argue that putting pressures on students is a negative development as it damages students’ personal progression and mental development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ains knowledge and improve work skills. Because of the intensive competition in the job...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.04347826087 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.66531076033 2.80592935109 131% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622073578595 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4310906014 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.9375 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237897884394 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747961088231 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419594030188 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132335121363 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213269884053 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.75 12.4159519038 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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