Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
People watch television in a daily basis and because of such habit, television advertisements are usually used to entice people into focusing their attention to certain ideas or products. While it has been proven to be a highly successful method in marketing, it also has several negative side effects, especially, for young children. Due to such side effects, television advertisements should not target young children.
First of all, young children who are aged between two to five haven't fully constructed their perspective and television advertisements can affect their characteristics in a negative way. I would like to mention advertisements regarding toys targeted for children. Most of the toy related advertisements target children in each gender, respectively. They apply a disparate characteristic for each gender, such as showing aggressive and outgoing boys for toys that target boys, and shy and conservative girls for toys that target girls. Because children who are extremely young are still in the process of learning their preference and perspective, they are fully exposed without any resistance to the ideas the advertisements consist of. This can cause children to adapt stereotypical gender characteristics, making them believe that is how they should behave, even if it may conflict with their perspectives as they grow.
Secondly, because television advertisements are professionally designed to entice people to open their wallets by making them think that their current life is unhappy due to not having a certain product, it can teach children wrong consuming habits and cause depression. As mentioned above, because children are fully exposed to the advertisements, they would constantly compare themselves with the happy looking children who star in the advertisement and think that their lives are miserable because they do not own the toys in the advertisements. This can cause them depression. Moreover, whenever new toys are advertised, children would constantly have to buy new toys in order to keep themselves happy, which makes them to adapt wrong consuming habit. This habit would of course affect them when they become adults, since habits that have been adapted when young stays forever.
To sum up, television advertisements that directly target young children who are aged between two to five are fully exposed to such advertisements and can cause negative side effects, such as being affected to the ideas included in the advertisements, adapting wrong consuming habits, and falling into depression. Due to such reasons, I agree that television advertising should not aim directly toward young children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, while, of course, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49264705882 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10589314559 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.3087632173 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0625 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33261255575 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132715615283 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120006787733 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252265909256 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136373884047 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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