Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of a bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Many people consider that innate behaviors or characteristics result mostly in becoming a criminal in the future. However, I would argue that the main cause for this happening is from social agents and poverty.
On the one hand, there is a belief that a person’s nature determines whether or not they will turn to do criminal jobs. First, children who like playing marvelous games or have a violent trend, are more likely to approach illegal activities. Second, bad behaviors such as laziness, selfishness or even insubordination can breed future offenders. They tend to seek for acquiring money easily without working hard.
On the other hand, I maintain that the increase in crime rate is resulting from social issues and poverty. The most important reason is unemployment in global that put poor people at great risk of famine. Therefore, they have to break the law with an aim to support their families to make ends meet through difficult days. Another reason is that parents’ actions have an intensive influence on children’s cognition. If a child were born and nurtured in a better environment with a well-educated state, they will probably become a helpful member of the community or vice-versa.
In conclusion, although both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that social problems and poverty are more likely to cause an increase of crime.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 71, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1153.0 1615.20841683 71% => OK
No of words: 225.0 315.596192385 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12444444444 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83134483598 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.675555555556 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.266771108 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.0833333333 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188215540177 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588539723433 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808765326969 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114278373079 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693873260963 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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