Many people put their personal information online (address, telephone number,...) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking
purposes. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
In the backcloth of the digitalized world, people are bombarded with a variety of social networks leading to a controversial topic of whether the users should leave personal information on such platforms or not. Some assert that action would do beneficiaries as the method of communication, contact, and business's purposes whereas the others believe it would pose a threat to lives as the emergence of cybercrime. To some extent, I would like to argue that the issue has both merits and demerits.
On one hand, the idea of putting personal information on social media is beneficial to a certain extent. It is undeniable that such platforms namely FB, TikTok, and other similar things are taken into account for advertising reasons in a technological context. KOL and influencers, for example, can take advantage of social networks to meet potential customers and enterprises for advertising commodities. The business, in particular, can also effortlessly look for advertisers with specific contact methods. In terms of online shopping, that issue generates advantages for both purchasers and shops. Online shop or sellers can ask buyers for information that assist the selling process and the betterment of customer service. For instance, online fashion boutiques can counsel their consumers which size fits them best or what color is appropriate based on personal identification. Thanks to phenomenal customer care, the shops are able to enforce the brand image in customers' mindsets.
On the other hand, there are some reasons why I believe that trend may trigger adverse effects. First and foremost, the emergence of cybercrime stems from the influx of new money-making ways via personal data posted on social networks. As has often happened, unaware users are likely to fall prey to hackers by clicking on links that break the security barriers. Once personal information is extracted, it will be used for scams, blackmail, or misinformation. Admittedly, a number of greedy firms with low business ethics are willing to sell their consumer's data for financial purposes that arouse a strong sense of irritation if it is used for telesales of third corporations.
In conclusion, despite the aforementioned drawbacks, I would argue in favor of sharing information online outweigh these risks because of numerous financial advantages brought back.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, so, third, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38858695652 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03063940852 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595108695652 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6082988164 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.647058824 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247738031014 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691734467618 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551418394966 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125347075402 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512175430408 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, so, third, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38858695652 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03063940852 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595108695652 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6082988164 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.647058824 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247738031014 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691734467618 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551418394966 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125347075402 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512175430408 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.