Nowadays both men and women spend much money on beauty care. This was not so in the past. What may be the root cause of this behaviour? Discuss the reasons and possible results?
In this modern era, more and more male and female expend a lot of dollars to personal care products than some decades ago. There are several causes and considerable effects that I will elaborate more below.
Regarding the causes, current employees, particularly men, carry out various treatments because each job demands them to meet beauty standards. At an earlier time, appearance and facial beauty were the last requirements in some fields which those becomes paramount in professions such as steward and male beautician. Furthermore, in favour of the reduction of fine line and wrinkles, women aged over 40 have a strong desire to be ageless and crave on compliments in public. Noticeably, South Koreans are willing to spend big-budget around $700 a month to purchase the best anti-aging products (SK II and Estee Lauder).
Turning to the effects, beauty treatment could enable modern society to notch up prospect career, even seizing greater opportunities in entertainment industry. Individuals would embark on being a skincare Brand Ambassador (Song Kang-Bobbi Brown), together with his career rocketing to fame on Netflix. On the negative side, many women are diagnosed Body Dysmorphic Disorder due to the attractiveness of reaching body perfection. Aside from the risk of chemical cosmetic ingredients (Paraben) used in years, the cutting-edge technologies of plastic surgery convince women to look like dolls, in which this possibly ends up with failure happened to Jocelyn Wildenstein dubbed catwoman.
In conclusion, the causes of excessive expenses to beauty treatments both sexes rather than few years ago are the significant job requirements as well as the flawless skin achievement. Meanwhile, the knock-on effects include fostering individuals’ future career and enduring cosmetic surgery malpractices.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...go are the significant job requirements as well as the flawless skin achievement. Meanwhil...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, regarding, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57761732852 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00236019536 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.707581227437 0.561755894193 126% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8577331128 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.75 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139180320027 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397596884807 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0234731572062 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715821394969 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00987898570696 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.76 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...go are the significant job requirements as well as the flawless skin achievement. Meanwhil...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, regarding, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57761732852 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00236019536 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.707581227437 0.561755894193 126% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8577331128 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.75 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139180320027 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397596884807 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0234731572062 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715821394969 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00987898570696 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.76 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.