Some believe that one should spend more time being far away from the people we care about, because it is necessary for people to understand the importance of relationship of people we care about, while others think being away from people we care about can damage our relationships with them. Which one do you agree with? Why?
From a broad perspective, in the current states of affairs we face, in which so complex is the communication among peope that it is difficult to find true() relationships, it is not far-fetched to presume that the relatives and close friends play crucial role in order to cope with this problem. However, to which extent() they should spend time with each other is considered as a contentious issue. Thre is a growing segment of people who contend that the more time spend() with the dears, the worste() their relations become. I personally disputed with this idea and in the insuing paragraph, the rationale behind this statement will be further elaborated.
First and foremost, there is a substantial drop in effective communication. Thre is no denying the fact that human encountered a great revolution with the advent of the Internet. Indeed, aside from() its positive consequences which is undoubtedly the easier way for talking, lack of effective communication can be accounted as the negative ramification() of this event. Nowadays, individuals no longer are inclined to have face-to-face meeting, instead they opt to plug their laptop and do skype with their people. Therefore, the role of family is of the great importance for people to learn establish constructive relationship with people who they care about() and this aim will not come true even if they spend remarkable amount of time in order to get acquainted with each other's temper and characteristics. Subsequently, in this circumstance they will be able to support each other in any needed case.
Another vital point which should be taken into considerartion is that having constant relationships is an integral part of social life. Needless to say that human is a social creature and it necessitate to build constant relationships. Actually, individuals require a wide array of connections which each one requires its own specific treat(). Having spend more time, people find more common() interests within their mates() and that is why rarely do people feel sympathy for their neigbors death, and contrary give a sense of intense grief for loosing their close friends. According to the latest research attributing to Dr. Kevin Ride, a prominent and highly respected professor in the Department of sociology in Maquarie University, most of the long-term frienships coming from the colluegues close working with each other. This probe provide further legitimacy for this idea that people shortage of spending time probably ends up with superlative() relations or in the other words it renders() ruining the close relations.
To wrap it up, it is more judicious to say that human should try their best to be() keep in touch with the people who have specific position in their life. This issue is not only important due to paucity() of quality in communication in today's world, but it also hinders a person from constructing the precious connections which are an inevitable part of their nature.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 589, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to establish'
Suggestion: to establish
...he great importance for people to learn establish constructive relationship with people w...
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Line 2, column 771, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...me in order to get acquainted with each others temper and characteristics. Subsequentl...
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Line 3, column 191, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'necessitates'?
Suggestion: necessitates
... that human is a social creature and it necessitate to build constant relationships. Actual...
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Line 4, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...connections which are an inevitable part of their nature.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2460.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11434511435 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91686881231 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.0273575987 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.666666667 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7222222222 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236960644332 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651258699741 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596977382618 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144190174639 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262623927754 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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