Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For many years people have tried hard to make the earth a better place for themselves. All the technological devices are some instruments to help human to have a better life. It is a really controversial topic that either human activities damage the Earth or make it a better place to live. In my view the Earth is really being harmed by human activities for the following reasons.
First and foremost, human activity brings some problems to the Earth. The pollution that are added to the environment contaminated the water, soil and air. These pollutions not only are harmful to the human and other living creatures, but also brings lots of damages to the Earth. For example, last week I read in the newspaper that the most important problem that human will be struggle with in near future is the depletion of the Ozone layer which is the result of human activities. It has caused the Sun’s radiation to come to the earth through these layer which is really harmful to all the creatures in the Earth. As you can see human actitivies bring some irreparable damages to the Earth.
Second, human activities brings a lot of harm not only to themselves but also to all the creatures that live in this planet. Deforestation is the result of using forests land to use the area for building factories and bildings. By removing plants from the Earth which are really useful to refining the air human and adding a lot of pollutant to the Earth, human making it a harmful palce for every livings in the planet. Many creatures that lives in these areas are became extinct because they are losing their habitats and as they do not used to live in pollutant area, the number of them become lower and lower. Also, human activities bring lots of diseases not themselves. Many people are struggling with different diseases that are the result of their own activities such as hearth diseases, breathing problems and terminal cancers. People in past lived in a quiet places were there were no pollutions and they had no stresses in their lives and as a result people lived to a ripe old age. But today many people die from diseases, accidents etc.
In sum, though some may believe that the changes that human brings to the Earth are really beneficial for human, but as you can see the Earth is become a horrible place to live on, even for human. I think solving this problem needs more governmental cooperation among nations to craft treaties and agreements to help the earth maintain a good place for our children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mful to all the creatures in the Earth. As you can see human actitivies bring some...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun pollutant seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of pollutants'.
Suggestion: a lot of pollutants
...ul to refining the air human and adding a lot of pollutant to the Earth, human making it a harmful...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...creatures that lives in these areas are became extinct because they are losing their h...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...people die from diseases, accidents etc. In sum, though some may believe that the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, for example, i think, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49064364876 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463636363636 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6067222144 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.4 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390350191525 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141712858602 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910836370458 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273403295673 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556225034894 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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