Do you agree or disagree?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives
There is no doubt that family play the key role in society. No one can deny the direct or indirect effect of parents in young people's lives. Nowadays, some may hold the opinion that in the past, young people depended on their parents in order to make decisions. However, some may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that today young people are more depended on their family than the past. From my own perspective, the first belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reason.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that nowadays, there are more options to choose for getting advice rather than family. No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that today most of teenagers or teen people prefer to talk with their friends about their issues instead of their family. As an example, in my own experience, my girlfriend abandoned me two years ago. On that time, I had to make a important decision which was whether I move on and let it go or try to find her and ask her to give me one more chance. It was not easy for me to talk about this experience with family since I know they would tell me to forget about past and move on. Eventually I decided to talk to her and I could persuade her to give me one more chance. As you can see I could handle this issue by myself more properly.
The last but not the least reason by which the claim is justified is that most of the time parents think in tradition way. In other word, they usually come up with old ideas which are not handy anymore for this generation. Not only can they help their children, but also they might cause some problems for their children. For instance, one of my cousin married four years ago with a girl who was introduced to him by his mother. At first he really was not eager to marry with the girl but when his family insisted, he accepted finally. After a while, he did not seem to be happy and they had a lot of fight in their home. Their marriage didn’t come well at the end. They divorced only three months after their marriage. This experience taught me that were he to make his own decision, he probably would not divorce.
From what has been discussed, we may safely reach the conclusion that today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Not only do they have more choices, but also their idea is newer and more practical than their family's idea. Considering all reason mentioned above may lead us to try make our decisions by our own.
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- tpo q 1 3
- TPO 42 task 1 75
- TPO 41 Question 1 90
- Some parents offers their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 70
- Do you agree or disagree?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an deny the direct or indirect effect of parents in young peoples lives. Nowadays...
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Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...g reason. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the teenagers') or simply say ''most teenagers''.
Suggestion: most of the teenagers; most teenagers
... shadow of doubt on the fact that today most of teenagers or teen people prefer to talk with thei...
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Line 3, column 454, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... years ago. On that time, I had to make a important decision which was whether I ...
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Line 3, column 796, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ersuade her to give me one more chance. As you can see I could handle this issue b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, so, well, while, for instance, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41489361702 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24807044671 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1175397772 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323774623159 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857537499844 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991829953188 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223445746144 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998061046128 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.