Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do you support it or not?

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Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do you support it or not?

Submitted by payamesp2 on Sat, 02/17/2018 - 12:05

Nowadays, it is irrefutable that sports stars and actors become a public figure for millions of people all around the globe. Considering this, while some admirer of them tend to believe that they could be a good role model for youngsters, opponents stand against with different arguments. I am profoundly inclined to believe that following a professional role model could be beneficial especially for adolescents. This essay will consider both sides by providing some academic evidence before concluding.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why I support the idea of seeing to superstars as a role model. Firstly, many of professional sportsmen or sportswomen originally come from a poor family which could be a powerful motivation for young children. Secondly, many of famous public figures, such as Bill Gates or Brad Pitt participate in many charity or social activity, trying to change the world to become a better place with equality and sharing the wealth among all peoples. From my own experience, I always liked to become a successful mountain climber when saw a movie about mountain climbing at very young age.

On the other hand, opponents use an array of essential valid logic to prove that all superstars could not be a perfect exemplifies. According to an academic research conducted by Chicago Social University, many of these supermodels and sports champions are always attending in the smoke advertisement, charged with some criminal records such as drug consumption which all of these activities imitating by youths. Furthermore, some of them are just a pleasant facade, and in their real life, they do not follow any ethical values of the society.

To recapitulate, I pen down saying that, following celebrities and public figures are like a two-edged sword, and youngsters should wisely choose who to follow.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun charity seems to be countable; consider using: 'many charities'.
Suggestion: many charities
... Bill Gates or Brad Pitt participate in many charity or social activity, trying to change th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 20.9802955665 95% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 31.9359605911 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1207.87684729 128% => OK
No of words: 297.0 242.827586207 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21885521886 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88397547835 2.71678728327 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 139.433497537 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643097643098 0.580463131201 111% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 379.143842365 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8152290165 50.4703680194 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.166666667 104.977214359 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.9669160288 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.25397266985 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15992256196 0.242375264174 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548720932471 0.0925447433944 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590678335069 0.071462118173 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768488706672 0.151781067708 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755447754406 0.0609392437508 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 12.6369458128 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 53.1260098522 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.9458128079 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 11.5310837438 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.32886699507 112% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 55.0591133005 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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