The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The future of world lies in the hands of the today's youth. And society must do its rightful job of instilling in them, a sense of harmoniuos cooperation rather than cut-throat competition.
Cooperation can truly achieve great things. Take for instance the issue of Jallikattu in Tamil Nadu in India. To provide a bit of background, Jallikattu is a traditional south Indian sport that is mainly played in the rustic parts of the southern states. The government had banned the sport citing PETA's claim that it brought harm to the bulls that even proved to be fatal. PETA's claim was however, unsubstantiated with enough proof. There were many farmers who made additional income through this sport and specifically reared bulls all their lives to compete. It was a tradition that had been practiced for centuries together and was considered sacred even. It was an honour for the farmers when their bulls participated. To protect the tradition and revoke the government's orders based on PETA's baseless claims, massive protests were orgainsed all over the southern states. And the majority of the demographic that participated were the youth. They came together as one to fight against the government's orders and they manged to achieve just that. Thousand of students and young adults, put aside all their differences to fight for one cause and the result showed just what power they held when they acted together.
However, one cannot completely neglect the effect that healthy competition has on the growth of children. Competition always pushes oneself to do better and realise one's true potential. The reason we have ranks and the heirarchial power system in place is to awaken the latent potential one has in them. One can learn from the other and strive to become better versions of themselves by competing in the same level playing field. For example, only if one proves himself to be a good researcher by competing with others and displaying excellent levels of skill and passion will he be given the opportunity to elevate himself to the next level. Google's CEO Sundar Pichai started from the bottom and managed to prove himself to reach to the top. The position he is in is a result of him competing and proving himself.
However, there must be a fine balance between competition and cooperation. Both are essential and necessary but cooperation teaches us to respect our differences and work together rather than exploiting others' differences to our advantage. The world is indeed one big family and the youth of the world must be taught how to uplift others while lifting themselves. Both are unequivocally important.
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- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 33
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 58
- Company management should conduct routine monitoring of all employee e-mail correspondence. Such monitoring will reduce the waste of resources such as time and system capacity, as well as protect the company from lawsuits. 54
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 83
- "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in a 42
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...uture of world lies in the hands of the todays youth. And society must do its rightful...
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Line 3, column 1052, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a Thousand'.
Suggestion: A Thousand
...s and they manged to achieve just that. Thousand of students and young adults, put aside...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and strive to become better versions of themselves by competing in the same leve...
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Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tage. The world is indeed one big family and the youth of the world must be taugh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2197.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 436.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03899082569 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7061528011 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561926605505 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6895022224 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.88 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.44 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132504241597 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0297260283845 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452767351392 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837087942516 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469536179536 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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