Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
In the given argument, the author states that deer is being unable to follow the age-old migration pattern across the frozen sea because of that deer’s population is declining. To support the conclusion author presents the some evidence on the basis of report of local hunter and global warning report. At first glance these evidence seem to buttress the author’s conclusion. But after the meticulous examination, author is unsuccessful to maintain many indispensible factors and raises some skeptical question. Hence, the author’s conclusion can be considered as incomplete and not convincing.
Firstly according to author deer search the food by walking over the island to island. It may be possible that deer is not able to find proper food resources or even it may be possible that the limited amount of food resource as mentioned by author may go through paucity because of that deer’s population is declining.
In the given prompt only the hunter’s report is given so in my opinion perhaps excessive hunting practice by the local hunter for deer’s meet, skin , horns may be one the main reason for declining of deer’s population. In the world excessive and illegal hunting has significantly lower of different species such as lion, tiger etc. so if this case is true in this scenario the given conclusion may be somehow skeptical.
As we know that because of global warming snow melts , but because of same reason excessive cold also occur which might again increase the freezing amount of snow. If such case happens then at that condition, through more freezing ice deer can migrate from island to island for the search of food.
In conclusion the author’s conclusion is rife with holes and flaws, so it is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it, author needs to provide specific evidence as we discussed above. Also author ought to have knowledge about other contributing factor in order to make argument wise and plausible. Without further research this argument will be un substantial and open to debate.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 334 350
No. of Characters: 1652 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.275 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.946 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.553 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.6 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...port the conclusion author presents the some evidence on the basis of report of loca...
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Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...report is given so in my opinion perhaps excessive hunting practice by the local ...
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Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... local hunter for deer's meet, skin , horns may be one the main reason for de...
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Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'lowed', 'lowered'.
Suggestion: lowed; lowered
...e and illegal hunting has significantly lower of different species such as lion, tige...
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Line 4, column 53, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hat because of global warming snow melts , but because of same reason excessive c...
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Line 4, column 59, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cause of global warming snow melts , but because of same reason excessive cold al...
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Line 4, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat condition, through more freezing ice deer can migrate from island to island f...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...pecific evidence as we discussed above. Also author ought to have knowledge about ot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, then, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 334.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17065868263 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84674291497 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553892215569 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3301599441 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.9375 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125933171762 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458308728846 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878396441263 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0836639649055 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835096649432 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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