The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of Movies Galore, a chain of video rental stores.“In order to reverse the recent decline in our profits, we must reduce operating expenses at Movies Galore’s ten
video rental stores. Since we are famous for our special bargains, raising our rental prices is not a viable way to
improve profits. Last month our store in downtown Marston significantly decreased its operating expenses by
closing at 6:00 P.M. rather than 9:00 P.M. and by reducing its stock by eliminating all movies released more than
five years ago. Therefore, in order to increase profits without jeopardizing our reputation for offering great
movies at low prices, we recommend implementing similar changes in our other nine Movies Galore stores.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be addressed in order to decide whether
implementing the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result and explain how the answers to those
questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The memorendum's recommandation suggest a reduction in expenses at Movies Galore's ten video rental store in oder forthe Movies Galore company to continue to be profitable. The main reseaon for this suggestion is based on the fact that similar reduction in operating expenses has been proven to be healthy for the companies profitabily in the Marston store. However, the fatal flaw of this memorendum is that it does not present a congent case that highlight the similarity in terms of the envionnemental carateristic, purshaing power, customer prefarence, and other incentive between the the Marston store and the other nine store in which they intend to expand the same policy.
Although the policy of reducing is proven to be successful in the Marston store, it might not be easily application in the other nine store unless all the ten store are operating in similar environnement where they are subject to the same enabling factors such as compatition, the custumer bargaining power, customers' preference, the purshasing power, and any other factor that have sgnificant bearing on the ability of the stores to operate. Thus, this memorendum find its weakness
in the fact that it does not provide any information of comparision about those factors of influence.
Moreover, even though reducing operating expenses is the only best approach to save the Movies Galore's from going bankrupt, this policy can take numerous forms. By suggesting that because the Marston store was able to regain profitabily as a result of closing ealier than before, and that this has to be applied to the other nine stores, this does not again take into account the specifity of the other nine stores. Maybe some of the other nine stores have more custumers after 6:0 PM than the Marston store. And then, applying the same policy everywhere else will further harm the the Movies Galore's profit and will not solve the problem. Maybe, they just need to reduce their cost else.
As the memorendum does not present enough information about the specifity of the ten store, applying this recommandation may not be effective as the stores might be different to each other.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1767 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.963 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.653 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.222 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.625 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 584, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...prefarence, and other incentive between the the Marston store and the other nine s...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 584, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...prefarence, and other incentive between the the Marston store and the other nine s...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...us, this memorendum find its weakness in the fact that it does not provide any i...
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Line 11, column 423, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ecifity of the other nine stores. Maybe some of the other nine stores have more custumers a...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 579, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...olicy everywhere else will further harm the the Movies Galores profit and will not solv...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 579, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...olicy everywhere else will further harm the the Movies Galores profit and will not solv...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, as to, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14164305949 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78126958789 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507082152975 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.658345389 57.8364921388 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.0 119.503703932 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0909090909 23.324526521 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0972202511519 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488593787754 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639179646553 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0473669299931 0.128457276422 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510230071538 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.