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The author says that if the budget of the movie is not increased by 10% , quality of the movie will be compromised amid new and inexperienced directors and crew and the movie is bound to fail. While this may seem plausible, the author fails to back his assumption and conclusion with enough evidences.
Firstly, the author demands for a 10% increment in the budget of the movie. At first hand, we don't even know what the actual budget of the movie is and whether it is insufficient by the standard of the movie they are going to produce. Unless the author can provide enough evidences of some similar movies , made under similar situations took the extra 10% , which the author is demanding , the assumtion is not justifiable. It can be that similar good quality movies produced in the same year actually took much less to make than the current budget of the movie. Thus, we here require further evidence to support what money it actually takes to make such movies at a good quality.
Secondly, the author asserts that the director appointed in the movie is new to the industry. He is only used to make commercials. He further asserts that the advertising business is notoriously wasteful and the director will take more takes than require increasing the expenses. There are many flaws to this assumption, First, though the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, we exactly don't know the what exactly for. May be the actors in the commercials are not as efficient in movies. May be the arrangement crews were not that efficient. Movie industry is quite efficient at these things and usually the artists are professional. We can say that the advertisement business was extravagant because of the drector and the same will repeat in the movie.
Moreover, the author asserts that they have saved some money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors and due to this they will have to pay extra to the crew and the actors as the movie will be delayed because of the incapability of directors and producers to arrange things. First, there is no evidence that the producers and directors will fail to arrange things on time. We can clearly assess this by looking on the track record of the directors and producures. Even if they lack in such ability, the extra cost to hire better assistant producers and directors may result in lesser cost than paying for the actors and crews for delay.
In sum, though increasing the budget of the movie may sound very plausible to make the movie better, but he struggles to provide much evidences supporting his suggestions. Further research must be done inorder to verify why the advertising industry is extravagant and why it will apply to the movie through the director. Morover, the cost of hiring better assistant producers and directors should be compared against the cost to be paid to crews and actors as a result of delay. Only when these claims are properly defended , the author's pledge to increase the budget by 10% will be justifiable.
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- Xyz 16
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...get of the movie is not increased by 10% , quality of the movie will be compromise...
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Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... budget of the movie. At first hand, we dont even know what the actual budget of the...
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Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... enough evidences of some similar movies , made under similar situations took the ...
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Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...er similar situations took the extra 10% , which the author is demanding , the ass...
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Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...xtra 10% , which the author is demanding , the assumtion is not justifiable. It ca...
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Line 5, column 397, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ess is notoriously wasteful, we exactly dont know the what exactly for. May be the a...
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Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...tly dont know the what exactly for. May be the actors in the commercials are not a...
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Line 5, column 502, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...als are not as efficient in movies. May be the arrangement crews were not that eff...
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Line 9, column 130, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...vie better, but he struggles to provide much evidences supporting his suggestions. F...
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Line 9, column 524, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... when these claims are properly defended , the authors pledge to increase the budg...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2506.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 514.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87548638132 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65475079492 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.410505836576 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 779.4 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6609707721 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.956521739 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.347826087 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.218282227539 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0743258471296 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.128457276422 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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