The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The environment that young people lives in plays a vital role in their success in future. All people around them such as family, teachers, friends contributes to form their perspective and attitude toward life. However, the question that living in a competition environment or in cooperation one is better for teenager's leadership skills has become a central topic of debate between educators. In my point of view, young people need to be involved in both those types of environment for the complete development because of 2 reasons.
First of all, nobody can be successful alone without support from others. Thus, teenagers must learn how to stay hamorny with people around them, especially to their pair. No one would willing to give support to an arrogant and selfish person who would do anything to win. For example, in school, students need to get voted to be a leader of the class or club. There are no opportunity for students who are pugnacious toward their friends to be leader. Another example of the need for cooperation is there are several tasks requiring team work in which people must master at working together without egotist. Therefore, young people require an environment in which people support each other to develop the right attitude toward others.
Secondly, teenager also needs to experience in a sense of competition to motivate and inspire them to overcome themselves. The hunger of being the best and being respected is human nature. If young people must compete to be the best, they would push themselves hard to be better. For example, in a class, if students get reward because of their highest score in the exam, all of them would study harder and try their best they can. It is clear that competing helps young people to be a better version of themselves. However, some people argue that competition would lead to negative behavior. Young people would have immoral actions to defeat others. It is true to a minor but not a majority. Moreover, to be a leader in future, teenagers must learn how to treat right to people, not only doing anything to win.
In conclusion, I believe that competition environment is as important as the cooperation one for the success of teenagers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: in the future
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Suggestion: in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 374.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94385026738 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65429384502 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513368983957 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1788015616 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.0476190476 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201362607017 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632051518294 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365525297069 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128985042268 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324682047109 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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