It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
It is said that people necessarily step out of their comfort zone in their occupations as well as private life. From my perspective, this action would bring benefits that dominate the drawbacks. In this essay, I will discuss this statement with relevant examples.
On the one hand, encountering perils and sacrificing a stable life is not effortless in terms of both health and family. Since investing time, money and health in order to pursue a further career does not mean that they could reach a successful in occupation. Moreover, this hazard could even take a toll on their family and themselves if once they failed. For instance, their health suffers from degradation because of sleepless situation, and due to the failure, their family’s overall well-being has a certain impact. However, if residents keeping stay in their comfort zone, they will not have any opportunity to gain additional improvements such as wealth which probably bring their children a brighter future and higher living standards.
On the other hand, humans have been witnessing many achievements along with taking risks. Take Bill Gates, for example, he dropped out one the most qualified college at that time, Harvard universities, and attempted to establish his own empire which is bring him billion of dollar per year. Furthermore, the similarity is also appeared in the case of Ellon Must, the co-founder of Tesla, these astonishing accomplishments not only bring the enhancement of their lifestyle but also contribute to the development of a whole human civilization. Therefore, they deserve to reap the rewards for their efforts.
In conclusion, giving up a stable life is not a comfortable option for everyone, but I believe they will gain more than they have paid for the perils
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
...ed to establish his own empire which is bring him billion of dollar per year. Further...
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Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a billion'.
Suggestion: a billion
...blish his own empire which is bring him billion of dollar per year. Furthermore, the si...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19860627178 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87277105919 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630662020906 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6383337267 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.769230769 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3846153846 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192233821706 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064307858268 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497352177801 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102537167601 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471311932664 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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