Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is sometimes argued that changing children's harmful lifestyle is an obligation for both schools and parents. I totally agree with this statement. However, children should also take responsible for this problem too.
On the one hand, parents and family are the the one who born and nourish children, so they always play the most important role in educate their offsprings. Parents can teach soft-skills for children more efficiently and receive better results than school, while they are more in contact with children. For that reason, parents should take care of their children and spend more time teaching them good habits and healthy lifestyle. By the way, they can also gather family bonds with children. In addition, schools also take this responsibility, since schools refer to their "second home" and the second place that youth spend most time. When kids or teenagers go to school, teachers can teach them both lessons and organize outside activities to upgrade their friendships and get rid of pupils' bad lifestyle.
On the other hand, children themselves must also take time to reflect on their harmful lifestyle. Many children nowadays are getting trouble with obesity, lack of social knowledge and soft skills. These problems are observing the increasing regularly, which are caused by bad habits, lazy and inactive in daily. In particular, children are the only ones who can deal with. If only they desired to change and receive good education and care from adults, they could attain. From my own experience, I used to depend on those high tech devices and get lack of social skills, experience and became inactive. But with drastic help from my family, schools and especially my own efforts, I successfully overcame this problem.
In conclusion, changing an unhealthy lifestyle requires so many efforts from schools, family and children. If we spend enough attempt, we could achieve the goal.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...On the one hand, parents and family are the the one who born and nourish children, so t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28664495114 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65324192806 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57654723127 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3753070923 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1666666667 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0555555556 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269714179958 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913476447771 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685662226555 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1862432774 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937795666778 0.056905535591 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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