Nowadays people depend on technology for leisure activities Is this a positive or negative development

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Nowadays people depend on technology for leisure activities. Is this a positive or negative development

Submitted by duchuynh on Fri, 02/10/2023 - 09:49

Depending on technology for entertainment activities is a hotly-debated topic that often divides opinion. From my perspective i agree up to point positive development for many reason

First of all , depending on technology for leisure activities bring the positive development. For instance,in the past when techonology is not popular in match such as football, baseketball. Happening many un-fair from referee or some situation out of vision of referee that thay do not cover. The ending was take a public outrage. However, nowadays many technology are applying in ,support referee and join in with a part of game, and everything is clear including fault and analysis the situation. In addition; for entertainment with technology helps them improve the quality of video. Bring the output of many shows to viewer more satisfy.

Secondly, technology must be a part of leisure activites. Because this reason, nowadays the demand of entertainment of people are more becoming growth everyday. Quality of output must be update and improve recently. For example some new-tech from many major such as monophonic technology support for listening to music , Var support for sport including football, baseketball, swimming, quality camera for export quality video such as 4k video. The improvement of technology prove the development of this country, all the producers try to make thier viewer have a best experience when using their technology. In my point of view technology in these activities is a general face for each major.

In conclusion, although have negetive idea when depend on techonology so much, it is clearly that positive is outweight negative development for several reason

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...en divides opinion. From my perspective i agree up to point positive development...
^
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... From my perspective i agree up to point positive development for many reason ...
^^
Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...elopment for many reason First of all , depending on technology for leisure act...
^^
Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...g the positive development. For instance,in the past when techonology is not popul...
^^^
Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he positive development. For instance,in the past when techonology is not popular...
^^
Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pening many un-fair from referee or some situation out of vision of referee that ...
^^
Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun technology seems to be countable; consider using: 'many technologies'.
Suggestion: many technologies
...ake a public outrage. However, nowadays many technology are applying in ,support referee and jo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nowadays many technology are applying in ,support referee and join in with a part ...
^^
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...ng fault and analysis the situation. In addition; for entertainment with technology help...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 607, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e the quality of video. Bring the output of many shows to viewer more satisfy. ...
^^
Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ment of people are more becoming growth everyday. Quality of output must be update and i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 319, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...echnology support for listening to music , Var support for sport including footbal...
^^
Line 5, column 562, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...producers try to make thier viewer have a best experience when using their techno...
^
Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...e is outweight negative development for several reason
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42965779468 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00886077229 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566539923954 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.9311502489 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415755688572 0.244688304435 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116812424251 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102841133207 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249592828184 0.151304729494 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332561212939 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...en divides opinion. From my perspective i agree up to point positive development...
^
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... From my perspective i agree up to point positive development for many reason ...
^^
Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...elopment for many reason First of all , depending on technology for leisure act...
^^
Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...g the positive development. For instance,in the past when techonology is not popul...
^^^
Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he positive development. For instance,in the past when techonology is not popular...
^^
Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pening many un-fair from referee or some situation out of vision of referee that ...
^^
Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun technology seems to be countable; consider using: 'many technologies'.
Suggestion: many technologies
...ake a public outrage. However, nowadays many technology are applying in ,support referee and jo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nowadays many technology are applying in ,support referee and join in with a part ...
^^
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...ng fault and analysis the situation. In addition; for entertainment with technology help...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 607, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e the quality of video. Bring the output of many shows to viewer more satisfy. ...
^^
Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ment of people are more becoming growth everyday. Quality of output must be update and i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 319, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...echnology support for listening to music , Var support for sport including footbal...
^^
Line 5, column 562, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...producers try to make thier viewer have a best experience when using their techno...
^
Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...e is outweight negative development for several reason
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42965779468 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00886077229 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566539923954 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.9311502489 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415755688572 0.244688304435 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116812424251 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102841133207 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249592828184 0.151304729494 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332561212939 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.