schools should focus more on teaching students how to succeed in the world of work and less on how to succeed academically. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is claimed that schools should emphasize more on training students to be well-rounded employees and less on promoting academic achievements. I partly agree with this argument due to the following reasons.
To begin with, I agree that schools should concentrate more on educating and orienting students to be successful employees. Although academic achievement gained at school is merely a part leading to success in real life, many schools place excessive emphasis on teaching students theory and somehow disregard to equip them with practical knowledge. If students want to be outstanding workers who attract the attention of renowned companies, they will have to develop their soft skills such as communication, negotiation, and persuasion instead of just concentrate on passing the exams with flying colours. For example, in case students dream of being a successful businessman, they can not only depend on school subjects such as microeconomics and macroeconomics. It is obvious that they also need to have a good grasp of negotiation and persuasion skills to deal with their partners and customers. For another instance, Vietnamese schools seem to be obsessed with the academic achievements of students. Thus, they just strive to train students to be proficient in the academic domain and neglect the importance of practical skills. As a result, Vietnamese graduates often have difficulty in adapting themselves to real circumstances. Hence, schools should emphasize more on equipping students with the savvy to achieve success in work.
However, I do not approve that schools should concentrate less on assisting students to achieve academic success. Although knowledge acquisition is not the only factor that contributes to success in work, it is a fundamental foundation for success. Without having a thorough grasp of theoretical learning, students will have difficulty in practising and working in real life, so it is significant for schools to stimulate students to excel in schools. For example, a doctor is a very demanding job that requires much academic learning and rigorous training. If students do not study academic theories well, they can make serious mistakes such as incorrect diagnosis and ineffective treatment.
To sum up, I partly approve of the viewpoint that teachers should concentrate more on training students to become the first-class worker in the workforce due to the above-mentioned reason. Nonetheless, they should not care less about stimulating students to gain academic success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, nonetheless, so, thus, well, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 388.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50773195876 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11008370131 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507731958763 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3626028872 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.722222222 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220848873414 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858491214998 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658799721625 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15987383992 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158119895117 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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