Although it is sometimes thought that the environment is critically responsible for one’s intelligence, others consider that the key is represented by genetics. There are valid opinions on both sides, which I will discuss now.
On the one hand, some people think that the genetic material transmitted from the parents to the child affects her or his acuity over time. Researchers say that there are numerous factors which are influencing intelligence, and that heredity has its role in this equation. In other words, various studies are showing, for instance, the similarities between the intellectual behaviour of adopted children and the one of their biological parents, even though they have lived separated. Furthermore, the emotional state of the mother during the pregnancy is believed to have an influence over the cognitive behaviour of her future baby, and that is why some of them are reading quality books or listening to music in that period.
On the other hand, others emphasize that the whole environment defines a person’s intelligence. For most well-rounded adults their presence of mind is something that they have improved during their school years, work and life experience. For example, people who learn to speak more languages are considered to have a higher IQ. Secondly, the home-environment is held accountable for the development of emotional intelligence, especially in childhood when parents have a major role in upbringing their children. Finally, nutrition is the one that secures the success of a person’s cognitive capacity thru its nutrients which are considered to be vital not only for the physical development but also for the mental growth. For instance, children with poor diet tend to underperform academically compared to those with a healthy diet.
In conclusion, I feel that the genetic inheritance responsible for intelligence is outweighed by the multiple environmental factors which are defining a person’s cleverness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1700.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51948051948 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17075335569 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584415584416 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2650647863 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.769230769 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3846153846 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304791547606 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892584368407 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064647685082 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185586553173 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550616892888 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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