Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?
Learning singing, acting and painting, especially at the primary schools, are often considered to be as necessary as other academic disciples. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this view because it is enormously beneficial for the holistic development of students.
Firstly, attending music and drama classes enhance the cognitive abilities of children. To illustrate, while participating in these activities, they imagine and implement different methods for expressing their feelings and thoughts which makes them more intellectual, leading to better academic performance. For instance, a survey conducted by Delhi Public School, Amritsar, reveals that learners who take part in sculpture making competitions every year attain higher percentage compared to others.
Secondly, it provides relaxation to children, which is indispensable for their ideal psychological development. While contemplating on difficult subjects, they often suffer from apprehension and frustration; therefore, providing them with a break for drawing and singing is imperative to rejuvenate them. For example, in 1987, about 63% of the school goers in Finland were suffering from depression and mania owing to the excessive encumbrance of studies. Hence, the education department made drawing a compulsory subject, which helped students to cope with these conditions.
Finally, studying art subjects plays an important role in the development of social skills among juveniles. In other words, while partaking in painting and dancing, they often have to perform in groups, which teaches them cooperation, teamwork and discipline. As an outcome, they become able to adjust effectively with others. To exemplify, according to a report published in The Cosmopolitan, an international magazine, pupils who indulge in group activities at schools happily share toys and clothes with their siblings, but others often show possessive behaviour.
To conclude, since art classes upsurge intelligence level, social skills and reduce stress, I would argue that it is significant to give them equal importance in the school curriculum.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to sing', 'to singe'.
Suggestion: to sing; to singe
Learning singing, acting and painting, especially at the...
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Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tment made drawing a compulsory subject, which helped students to cope with these...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89250814332 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09872841571 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.677524429967 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7693969784 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.214285714 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15400477682 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467346129251 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455685221559 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843341054157 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039667978346 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.88 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.95 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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