Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Earning money and managing how to spend it plays a crucial role in our individual lives. Regarding to this role, it is important to learn how administrating financial benefits. Some people believes one can learn managing own money in adulthood, however, in my point of view, I believe children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. My reasons are elaborated in the following.
First of all, the young age is a suitable era for learning anything. However, when we grow up, the percent of learning decreases. Scientific statistics demonstrate that the best period for learning is when you are teenager. Thus, in this regards, when someone is child he/she can be learned better than his/her adulthood.
The second reason is habits. If one learns something sooner one can be converted to a habit. Therefore, learning how to manage own money in childhood leads to a habit in adulthood. On the other hand, there are many psychological facts illustrating that if you do not perform an activity already, it is hard to carry it out later.
As a final reason, learning how to obtain money in childhood and experience it has low risk than doing such an activity in adulthood. Indeed, you can learn how to manage your own money when you are a young by founding in some factories, buying their stocks and so on. Experiencing these activities will learn you more. Moreover, it has low risk, because you do not have to investigate more money and if you lose them you will not be worry.
In conclusion, I concur that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age rather than at a middle-age, because childhood is a great time for learning, it can be led to a habit, and it has less risk.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1427.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72516556291 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69530728742 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526490066225 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7935294081 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9411764706 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317231594978 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102632896289 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775561955902 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191335312682 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679355664552 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.