If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying
Although it is generally believed that a person should work in order to feel comfortable as a member of society, the question remains whether one has to grab any chance in that respect, or to wait for the best opportunity. Personally, I believe that people should not lose an opportunity to get a job irrespective of its possible drawbacks. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, waiting for a better occupation will cost money. It is obvious that it may take some time, and in some cases months or years to find a rewarding job. Consequently, the subsequent waiting period is a lost time in terms of earning money, which is unacceptable. My own experience is a compelling example of this. After I quitted my first job, I had to wait for nearly a year to find a new one. All that period of time I was short of money, a fact that embarrassed me a lot.
Also, it should be mentioned that any work is a good possibility to "sharpen the saw", or, in other words, to improve one's skills. It is explained by the fact that each job has its functions to fulfill on a systematic basis and under the employer's control. That in turn forces people to work hard, consistently, and therefore to develop their abilities. For instance, my brother is a well-known doctor, who, however, once had to work as a worker on factory. His duties were connected with packaging the production in boxes - a routine, which helped him a lot in his doctor's career.
Finally, apparently any actual work helps to find a new and a better work. It is due to the fact that potential employers always pay attention to this issue. So, if a person does not work for a while, the prospective employer may avoid hiring him or her. The relevant studies also indicate this issue. Thus, according to the survey conducted by the National Labor Center employers are prone to hire employees who already possess a position. This is explained by their assumption that a person who does not work may have some problems that will not let them work in a satisfying manner.
To sum up briefly, it is a fact that working is better than waiting for a better possibility. Its explanation is threefold: first, working person earns money, second, any occupation is a chance to improve one's skills, and, third, the chances to find a suitable job are higher for a person who already holds a job.
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- TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 415, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...arly a year to find a new one. All that period of time I was short of money, a fact that embar...
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Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...w', or, in other words, to improve ones skills. It is explained by the fact tha...
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Line 4, column 562, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a satisfying manner" with adverb for "satisfying"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...me problems that will not let them work in a satisfying manner. To sum up briefly, it is a fact that ...
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Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
..., any occupation is a chance to improve ones skills, and, third, the chances to find...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, briefly, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in other words, in some cases, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60465116279 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74668821775 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527906976744 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2886148458 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188528041908 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515801784297 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540176255323 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110845594707 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500696831577 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.