Tpo 40- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ney if they have good grades in school, i think its a brilliant idea. I feel this...
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Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...hey have good grades in school, i think its a brilliant idea. I feel this way for t...
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Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explore in the following essay. ...
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Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...d give more attintion to their homeworks ,in addition they will be more energestic...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... know this wiil bring benefits to them. so they will spend less time in playing an...
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Line 7, column 382, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...l experience is a good example of this. when i was in school my dad give me money ev...
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Line 7, column 387, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...erience is a good example of this. when i was in school my dad give me money ever...
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Line 7, column 472, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...mmer when grades of school apeared, and i use this money for buying things i want...
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Line 7, column 507, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... and i use this money for buying things i want like bicycle, so this encourages m...
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Line 7, column 561, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...cycle, so this encourages me to do best i can in every stations of my journey. ...
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Line 13, column 132, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Furthermore
...y lead to sucess and reaching your goal.Furthermore it will creat a responsable hight selfs...
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Line 13, column 132, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...y lead to sucess and reaching your goal.Furthermore it will creat a responsable hight selfs...
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Line 13, column 197, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... a responsable hight selfsteamed person in future.For instance when i gradute from hight ...
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Line 13, column 207, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...able hight selfsteamed person in future.For instance when i gradute from hight scho...
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Line 13, column 280, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...hight school and accepted in unevesity, i managed to be wise with my money and sp...
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Line 13, column 349, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...money and spend it in things benefits me ,in addition i was attend my courses and ...
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Line 13, column 363, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...d it in things benefits me ,in addition i was attend my courses and study hard be...
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Line 13, column 369, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'attended'.
Suggestion: attended
...n things benefits me ,in addition i was attend my courses and study hard because i kno...
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Line 13, column 410, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ttend my courses and study hard because i know eventualy i will be what i want to...
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Line 13, column 427, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...and study hard because i know eventualy i will be what i want to be. In c...
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Line 13, column 442, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...because i know eventualy i will be what i want to be. In conclusion, rewa...
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Line 19, column 141, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...es in study and makes a responsable man in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, regarding, second, so, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1180.0 1977.66487455 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 251.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70119521912 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63636067577 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533864541833 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 363.6 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.750483526 48.9658058833 234% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 168.571428571 100.406767564 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.8571428571 20.6045352989 174% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.8571428571 5.45110844103 273% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259017502223 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134590557063 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654623375333 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170122401775 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069500287659 0.0645574589148 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 11.7677419355 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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