People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
People’s behavior is challenged and stimulated by the environment they are exposed to. Certainly, any student has been under stressfull testing conditions during his or her training. Though every individual manage one’ emotions in his or her idiosyncratic way, stress and exhaustion can push a student to cheat, plagiarize or become either significantly productive, or in the worse case scenario, counterproductive- turning a blank exam back to the examinator. It is the situation per say that generate an impulse and a responsive attitude that is considered usually caracteristic and can even be categorized. Very rarely would you see a stressed student under a standardized test shouting and dancing. He or she may be bitting his nails, shaking his legs and managing his behavior in a standard manner as other student would under similar circumstances.
Furthermore, a behavior is adaptative to a situation. As a matter of fact, it is what life requires and taught humanity. As history has proven through Darwin theory of evolution, we evolved physically through time and circumstances. The environment requiring certain skills for survival are then selected and preserved in our genertic code and passed down from one generation to the next. It is “the survival of the fittest.” The consummate hunter who developped a strong musculature, impressive dexterity and sharp sight will be capable of getting a raft of animals to feed from. It is this adaptive capability that is acquired and not his innate nature that depict the painting of evolution and this is the belief which dominate the scientific world.
Though, behavior is generated in response to outside forces, it is ultimately the choice of the individual to start in a particlar path. Indeed, every individual has what is so often referred to as “the free will.” A teenager can choose to drink alcohol and drive or to abstain, eventhough he or she may be under a social group influence. One can decide to refuse to use drug, even if it has been offered at no charge, not only for the reason being that it is illegal, but because it can be detrimental to one’s health and one’s peer surrounding him or her under influence of the drug. “Free will” has even been mentioned in the bible and is an accepted belief that dominate many religion. In Judaism, Pharaoh may have had his heart hardened by God so as to not let the Jewish nation leave Egypt, but ultimately it was up to him to decide to inslave them in the first place or to free them from slavery before any of the plagues striked upon his nation.
Similarly to many beings on earth, humans are given the ability to respond to their surrounding and adapt as indicated. However, it is one’s own decision to choose which route to take at a fork after beeing directed to an intersection.
- To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. 83
- Society' roles rely not only in providing its leaders competitive skills within a growing economy, but to also teach them the importance of working with a team in order to be succesful in their endeavors. The argument claims that the society is incumbent 33
- Claim: The best test of an argument is its ability to convince someone with an opposing viewpoint.Reason: Only by being forced to defend an idea against the doubts and contrasting views of others does one really discover the value of that idea. 66
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. 83
- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition 58
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, as to, as a matter of fact, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01050420168 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02405659031 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567226890756 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8515457926 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.526315789 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0526315789 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135069731832 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440446532765 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508987275557 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825985784652 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195543653198 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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