Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are role models for youngsters. Do you support it or not? (Agree/ disagree)
The role of celebrities, be it in sports or in entertainment, as a role model for youngsters is widely debated, with many people claiming that these famous personalities have hardly any didactic purpose to serve. In my opinion, this notion merits serious consideration.
There are a myriad of arguments in favour of my stance. The most conspicuous one is that these famous personalities often show the brighter side of their lifestyle and most of the inner aspects of their characteristics are hidden from the public. Not only are they involved in a race against each other to gain name, fame and money, but they are also unhappy in their family life, thus leading to many complications like depression, frustration, loneliness and the like. Needless to say, the likelihood that these shallow, artificial and greedy people will benefit youths in shaping their beliefs and ideologies in a positive way is bleak indeed and so no one would recommend that a teenager should pursue an artificial life like this. (Needless to say, all these demerits have a far-reaching impact on youngsters.)
Another overt facet of following celebrities is that rarely do they possess such essential attributes as moral and ethical values that are deemed vital in becoming a good human being. Besides, thanks to the ubiquity of the Internet and the popularity of the social networking sites, youngsters who are both immature and vulnerable are readily exposed to celebrities’ brawling over insignificant things and verbally assaulting their counterparts and what not. Hence, it is apparent why many believe that teenagers should rather imitate the lifestyle of their parents or teachers, who possess a deluge of qualities, from sincerity and honesty to perseverance and dedication. (Hence, it is apparent why many are against a youth’s following these artificial people as their role model.
In view of the arguments outlined above, one can conclude that the drawbacks associated with the youth’s imitating the lifestyle of celebrities are indeed too dire to ignore.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...in shaping their beliefs and ideologies in a positive way is bleak indeed and so no one would rec...
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...brities are indeed too dire to ignore.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, so, thus, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31402439024 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03733063388 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582317073171 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1744846067 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.25 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0606063105458 0.244688304435 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0229672358644 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407186336684 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0421006020185 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470592096476 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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