Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are role models for
youngsters. Do you support it or not?
The role of celebrities, be it in sports or in entertainment, as a role model for
youngsters is widely debated, with many people claiming that these famous
personalities have hardly any didactic purpose to serve. In my opinion, this notion
merits serious consideration.
Following celebrities by youngsters is of myriad concerns. The most conspicuous one
is that these famous personalities often show the brighter side of their lifestyle. Most
of the inner aspects of their characteristics are hidden from the public. They are
involved in a race against each other to gain name, fame and money. Attaining
worldly desires seems to be their sole objective. No matter how positive their
appearance might look, they are unhappy in their family life. They suffer from other
mental complications like depression, frustration, loneliness and the like. Out of
despair, many of them resort to drugs and some even commit suicide. There is no
denying that with all these concerns, no one would recommend that a teenager should
pursue an artificial life like this.
Another overt facet of celebrities is that rarely do they possess such essential
attributes as moral and ethical values that are deemed vital in becoming a good human
being. As such, they are often seen brawling over insignificant things, verbally
assaulting their counterparts and what not. Thanks to the ubiquity of the Internet and
the popularity of the social networking sites, youngsters who are both immature and
vulnerable are readily exposed to these altercations. Apparently, the likelihood that
these shallow, artificial and greedy people will benefit youths in shaping their beliefs
and ideologies in a positive way is bleak indeed. Teenagers should rather imitate the
lifestyle of their parents or teachers, who possess a deluge of qualities, from sincerity and honesty to perseverance and dedication. There is no doubt that youths can benefit
from these practical role models astronomically.
From what has been discussed, one can conclude that the drawbacks associated with
the youth’s imitating the lifestyle of celebrities far outweigh the upsides, if any.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, if, look, so, no doubt, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.5418719212 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 8.36945812808 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 5.94088669951 185% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 20.9802955665 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 31.9359605911 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1207.87684729 153% => OK
No of words: 335.0 242.827586207 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5223880597 5.00649968141 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 3.92707691288 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97789285324 2.71678728327 110% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 139.433497537 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608955223881 0.580463131201 105% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 379.143842365 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.65517241379 192% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6551724138 142% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8674511078 50.4703680194 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.777777778 104.977214359 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6111111111 20.9669160288 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 7.25397266985 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 26.0 4.12807881773 630% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0475648223464 0.242375264174 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0132851383884 0.0925447433944 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332351081058 0.071462118173 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0148378775774 0.151781067708 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474474035195 0.0609392437508 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 12.6369458128 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.1260098522 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 11.5310837438 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.32886699507 117% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 55.0591133005 202% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.94827586207 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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