Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are role models for youngsters. Do you support it or not?
The role of celebrities, be it in sports or in entertainment, as a role model for youngsters is widely debated, with many people claiming that these famous personalities have hardly any didactic purpose to serve. In my opinion, this notion merits serious consideration.
Following celebrities by youngsters is of myriad concerns. The most conspicuous one is that these famous personalities often show the brighter side of their lifestyle. Most of the inner aspects of their characteristics are hidden from the public. They are involved in a race against each other to gain name, fame and money. Attaining worldly desires seems to be their sole objective. No matter how positive their appearance might look, they are unhappy in their family life. They suffer from other mental complications like depression, frustration, loneliness and the like. Out of despair, many of them resort to drugs and some even commit suicide. There is no denying that with all these concerns, no one would recommend that a teenager should pursue an artificial life like this.
Another overt facet of celebrities is that rarely do they possess such essential attributes as moral and ethical values that are deemed vital to becoming a good human being. As such, they are often seen brawling over insignificant things, verbally assaulting their counterparts and what not. Thanks to the ubiquity of the Internet and the popularity of the social networking sites, youngsters who are both immature and vulnerable are readily exposed to these altercations. Apparently, the likelihood that these shallow, artificial and greedy people will benefit youths in shaping their beliefs and ideologies in a positive way is bleak indeed. Teenagers should rather imitate the lifestyle of their parents or teachers, who possess a deluge of qualities, from sincerity and honesty to perseverance and dedication. There is no doubt that youths can benefit from these practical role models astronomically.
From what has been discussed, one can conclude that the drawbacks associated with the youths imitating the lifestyle of celebrities far outweigh the upsides if any.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 610, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, if, look, so, no doubt, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.5418719212 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 8.36945812808 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 5.94088669951 185% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 20.9802955665 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 31.9359605911 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1207.87684729 149% => OK
No of words: 335.0 242.827586207 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37611940299 5.00649968141 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 3.92707691288 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95364951279 2.71678728327 109% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 139.433497537 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605970149254 0.580463131201 104% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 379.143842365 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6551724138 142% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0704215927 50.4703680194 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.055555556 104.977214359 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6111111111 20.9669160288 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 7.25397266985 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0533368182194 0.242375264174 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0146272690162 0.0925447433944 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381381584726 0.071462118173 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.041665304977 0.151781067708 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527300861633 0.0609392437508 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 12.6369458128 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.1260098522 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 11.5310837438 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.32886699507 117% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 55.0591133005 200% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.94827586207 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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