Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Recent years have been witness to increasing global temperature owing to global warming leading to a decline in the ice covers in the polar regions.But the authors take on the decline in the artic deer population on the islands of Canada being an effect of recent global warming trends is based on unsupported reports of the local hunters.Again such a claim is based on the assumption that the hunters are familiar with the entire territory and paths of migration of the artic deer popuation in the canadian isands.Futhermore assumption has been made that the deers in question always used the ice that covered the sea in the winter to travel from island to island is not supported by evidence which can refute the existance of some other alternative path.Thus the melting of the sea ice as a result of global warming thereby hindering the traditional mode of migration cannot be sated as a cause of decline in artic deer population.It can considered as a correlation as most.Owing to the reasons stated above it becomes logically straining to agree with the agument put forward by the author regarding the decrease in deer population.
It has been mentioned that the deer habitat is limited to land that is warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed cold enough to suport the formation of ice on the sea connecting the islands which allow the deers to travel between the islands.Such a description is vague and does not give a definitive location where the deers can be found.Nor the size of their habitat.Thus the report by the hunters stating that their numbers have dwindled does not hold good.Because it can also be considered that the deers simply moved father away from the location in which the hunters used to locate them and hence they were unable to see sufficient number of ders assuming that their numbers has decreased.It also means that the hunters may not be familiar with alternative paths that the deers might be taking while they move from one location to another in their habitat and hence the unsubstanciated reports.
In addition to the vague description of the deer habitat ,assumption has been made that the artics deers need to move from one island to another using the sea ice in search of food.This may not be the case as there may not be a need to move from one isalnd to another as there may be sufficient supply of food present in their habitat to support the population.Hence there may not be much movement of deers giving rise to reports of declining numbers.
In addition to that the assumption that global warming causes decrease declining population of artic deers in canadian islands is unsubstantiated.It can be agreed that that the decrease in the sea ice can be seen an obstacle to the traditional movement of the deers but that does do justice to the claim that such an obstacle has lead to a decrease in the numbers of the deers.Other factors can also achieve the same effect like hunting of deers,introduction of a new predatory species to the deer habitat,some disease that affects deers specifically and death due to accidents such as road accidents.
From the discussion above it can be concluded that the argument made by the author is unsubstanciated and has no evidence to support it.Knowledge of the predatory species in the deer habitat,addition of any new species,better knowledge of deer habitat,alternative migration paths and a better quantitative figure on deer death caused due to human interaction can share further light on the issue.
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Sentence: Recent years have been witness to increasing global temperature owing to global warming leading to a decline in the ice covers in the polar regions.But the authors take on the decline in the artic deer population on the islands of Canada being an effect of recent global warming trends is based on unsupported reports of the local hunters.Again such a claim is based on the assumption that the hunters are familiar with the entire territory and paths of migration of the artic deer popuation in the
Error: popuation Suggestion: population
Sentence: canadian isands.Futhermore assumption has been made that the deers in question always used the ice that covered the sea in the winter to travel from island to island is not supported by evidence which can refute the existance of some other alternative path.Thus the melting of the sea ice as a result of global warming thereby hindering the traditional mode of migration cannot be sated as a cause of decline in artic deer population.It can considered as a correlation as most.Owing to the reasons
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Sentence: stated above it becomes logically straining to agree with the agument put forward by the author regarding the decrease in deer population.
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Sentence: It has been mentioned that the deer habitat is limited to land that is warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed cold enough to suport the formation of ice on the sea connecting the islands which allow the deers to travel between the islands.Such a description is vague and does not give a definitive location where the deers can be found.Nor the size of their habitat.Thus the report by the hunters stating that their numbers have dwindled does not hold good.Because it can also be
Error: suport Suggestion: support
Sentence: In addition to the vague description of the deer habitat ,assumption has been made that the artics deers need to move from one island to another using the sea ice in search of food.This may not be the case as there may not be a need to move from one isalnd to another as there may be sufficient supply of food present in their habitat to support the population.Hence there may not be much movement of deers giving rise to reports of declining numbers.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 618 350
No. of Characters: 2875 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.986 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.652 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.541 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 68.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.829 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.453 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.744 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, regarding, so, thus, while, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 55.5748502994 175% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2917.0 2260.96107784 129% => OK
No of words: 597.0 441.139720559 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88609715243 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97002921567 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396984924623 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 927.0 705.55239521 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 149.0 22.8473053892 652% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 392.014668093 57.8364921388 678% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 729.25 119.503703932 610% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 149.25 23.324526521 640% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 22.0 5.70786347227 385% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.25449101796 590% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253038976939 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142312171555 0.0743258471296 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807249662477 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143955526552 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716861862625 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 76.2 14.3799401198 530% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -79.76 48.3550499002 -165% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 7.1628742515 269% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 61.4 12.197005988 503% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.27 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 14.36 8.32208582834 173% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 12.3882235529 460% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 61.6 11.1389221557 553% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 62.0 11.9071856287 521% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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