For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the contemporary world, opinions are divided as to whether children’s cognitive ability and social development depend primarily on teachers or parents. While teacher’s role is perceived as the main contributor, I believe it is not to say that parents’ responsibility has no redeeming features to youngsters.
On the one hand, there are several justifications why mentors act as influences on children’s mental and social development. Firstly, from primary school, most of the time kids are taken care of by teachers. Therefore, teachers would know what their students are devoid of instantaneously and tailor their teaching styles to cater for each student’s demands. For example, if an individual don’t know how to analyse the equations, the educators will immediately assist him in altering the misleading notions and stimulate his cognitive ability to solve the problems. Second, some teachers are specialized in training social skills, so it’s best to learn from them. Take making a speech as an example, unlike Vietnamese parents forcing their kids to learn by heart and repeat it when they are on the podium, teachers help them in not only memorizing key points easily but also expressing them naturally with the via verbal and non-verbal languages.
On the other hand, I believe that parental attention and guidance are also of pivotal importance to the enhancement of children’s thinking ability and social skills of their offsprings. To begin with,during their formative years, children are nurtured full-time by their parents. Hence, were it not for adequate and appropriate care from these people, children’s intelligence would be impaired. For instance, when parents cannot devote enough time and effort to make wholesome meals, kids would lack vitamins A,D,E,K and fatty acids in their daily consumption,which are crucial for the development of infant’s nervous system. Furthermore, the wellbeing of the family is another factor contributing to kids’ social ability. In particular, when exposed to fightings in a dysfunctional family, children will perpetuate violent behaviors or hold a disbelief about a ever-lasting marriage. As a consequence these kid will adopt an antisocial manner,hold a grudge against society and become a law-offender later in life.
In conclusion,both parents and teachers play essential roles in developing a child’s intelligence and social development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72752043597 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37589974115 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610354223433 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3209621068 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.375 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9375 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4375 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268068225941 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900127562192 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728407434748 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158333067588 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471302007418 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.25 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.15 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.