Some people think that art (such as painting and music) does not directly improve quality of people’s life, so the government should spend money on other areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over the past decades, national budget distribution has never failed to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although arts have long been placed in an inferior place compared with other more seemingly more important facets such as education, economy and health car. The issue as to whether that it should be more highly valued by government or not remains controversial. From my own perspective, as intangible arts might be, they can make the masses enjoy a better life. Firstly, it is important to recognize that arts, especially the visual ones, can make cities and towns more visually attractive and spectacular. Some may argue that public services are the things such as hospitals, roads and schools, and these things determine the quality of life that most of us will have. This argument could be true to some extent. However, they should take into account the fact that the monotonousness of cityscape causes profound influence on city dweller’s emotional well-being. For example, in vertical cities, the excessive uniformity and the sameness of skyscrapers are associated with high levels of stress, preventing people from giving full attention to tasks. This example indicates that the monotony of city’s visual values has adverse effects on morale, performance, and quality of work. Therefore, the investment in public architectural buildings, sophisticated decorative details can liven up people’s lives, make citizens proud of the modernization of their cities and their sense of happiness will also be improved. Secondly, it is equally important to recognize that arts are also an industry with great economic potential. Opponents would argue that the investment in arts is a waste of money. Nevertheless, they are ignorant of the fact that the rapid development of arts has been one of the main factors promoting national economies in many countries. A telling example is Korea, holding musical concerts has been taken as main strategy to attract international tourists to come and visit Korea, thereby fostering local tourism industry. The prevalence of K-pop musical bands and their wide appeal have facilitated the export of Korean products overseas and increased the attractiveness of Korea, as stars, celebrities, media personalities can enlist the sympathy of art-lovers and make their views extremely influential on fans worldwide. Examples of this kind are many, they show that the provision of incentives to art industry is of financial benefits in the long run.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...tion, economy and health car. The issue as to whether that it should be more highly valued by...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an make the masses enjoy a better life. Firstly, it is important to recognize th...
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...ly attractive and spectacular. Some may argue that public services are the things suc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 391.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40920716113 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95340059503 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 176.041082164 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606138107417 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9616613457 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.411764706 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150979687196 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440567184885 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0251918398279 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150979687196 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.15 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 78.4519038076 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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