Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Music is an universal language, spoken and understood by all. It is a common fact that music is a worldwide tool to communicate with other people on the world. In my opinion, I strongly agree that music is a spontaneous way to make the world more connected to each other, and in this essay I will explain why.
First, a piece of music can connect people with the same emotions together. Although different people share different nationalities or races, emotions are something that everyone has. We can change our emotions in many ways, and one of them is music. For example, I speak Vietnamese and one my friend speaks English, but both of us can feel the happy mood of “Rondo Alla Turca” by Mozart. Since it contains only notes, basically other people can feel it too, not only two of us. From this, people will seek others with the similar taste of music, therefore connections can be made.
Moreover, music is not defined by ages, it is defined by favor. Emotions as mentioned before can gradually develop a person’s favorite genres of music. There are countless music communities in the world at the moment, and they are all developed from just a group of people with the same passion for music. In a community related to music, an nine-year-old boy has the same respect as a fifty-year-old man. For example, at a festival called Defqon.1, organized at the Netherlands every June, a man whose age is 32 carried a boy on his back, although they just met each other for the first time. Ages is not a barrier for people who love music, it is just a number.
In conclusion, music is truly an effective way to bring people together. In my point of view, others should respect different types of music. They may do not suite someone or another, but no hate on other genres is the requirement for every single person who loves music.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69113149847 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64846282207 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547400611621 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1188453256 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2222222222 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257552277502 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948468285116 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718519551167 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169119469979 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276900390678 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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