The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The paragraph stated that the fondest way for young people to be prepared for society is insisting them a sense of leadership or cooperation. On certain fields of profession cooperation is focused rather than competition. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, two question must be answered.
First, the society has a various roles for citizens to fill in. In other words, there are roles beyond leaderships in governments and industries. It is possible that working in the government requires a helpful mind rather than leaderships, perhaps being helpful for citizens solving their problem could do a better job for people seeking the government for help. For example, if an old lady is attending the state government for applying for disability proof, but the person working there has nothing but accusations for other colleagues, and could actually help with the person in need. Could the government and the industries and seeking for people who could actually solve problems and work their way up in to leading positions? If either of these scenarios, prepare young people for leaderships is significantly weakened.
Second, is cooperation and competition comparable? Either should be equally important for society development. Perhaps cooperation and competition are equally valued abilities. A pharmacy company would set up different group of scientists and managers to develop new medicines for different diseases. However the pharmacy wouldn't be a monopoly, different companies would definitely develop similar drugs for the market. In this case, working in the pharmacy business would require both competition and cooperation, the former one for competing for a better profit, the ladder for better products. If the above is true, the argument does not hold water.
In conclusions, flawed due to several unknown assertions. I disagree with the statement above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 34, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'role'?
Suggestion: role
.... First, the society has a various roles for citizens to fill in. In other words...
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Line 9, column 302, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...p new medicines for different diseases. However the pharmacy wouldnt be a monopoly, dif...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 323, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ifferent diseases. However the pharmacy wouldnt be a monopoly, different companies woul...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 292.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53767123288 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97410755106 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575342465753 0.468620217663 123% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.0620581427 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8333333333 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2222222222 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260324733175 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829360147516 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871034643807 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145220189829 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811368319361 0.0628817314937 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.