The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The statement contends that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in any field is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, and not competition. I agree insofar as cooperation is the cardinal quality in team work, while competition comes hand in hand.
First, to be a successful leader in any field of life, one should understand how to act in accordance so that the groups of people from disparate fields must follow them. This comes hand in hand by realising the need of cooperation amopng thr young people of the society, by giving them relevant examples of successful leaders. For instance, Narendra Modi, the prime minister of India, gains success in whatever he does, by his nature of being done to earth and treating everyone equally. Because of his instillating a sense of coooperation in him, he has lead to develop healthy foriegn relations with Donald Trump, the prime minister of United States of America alongwith other nations' authoratives like Sheikh Mohammed, Vise President and Prime Minister of United Arab Emirates.
Second, young people must understand that cooperation is not only needed between leaders sharing the same status but also with people sharing lower or higher status. If a leader has to succeed in his ventures, he must understand the need of developing a sense of cooperation among the members of his/her team, in a particular area of interest. For example, some college's cultural head wants to organise a talent competition, he has to cooperate with the faculty head of that department as well as the students. He cannot organise it standing alone, and thinking everyone else is his competition.
Conversely, a society shouldn't neglect competition, as the youth should understand it is also a quality that leaders should inherit in themselves, only to a specific and required extent. In this fast growing competitive world, there will be someone at the top in each area. Developing a sense of competition, makes a leader realise the need of winning and being among the top few. For instance, a lot of countries are facing economical problems, in distributing the economy among the several fields of interest. In such a situation, a leader, representing the vast populace of a nation, must realise the most competiting factor for its nation as a whole, and hence, invest its economy in accordance to that.
To recapitulate, although the best way for a society to prepare its youth for leadership in government, industry, or even at personal level, is by inherting in them, the most important quality, that is cooperation. However, at the same time, developing a sense of competition, must follow it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, hence, however, if, second, so, still, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2247.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 444.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06081081081 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90424500188 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506756756757 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9899775077 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.176470588 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1176470588 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402688931239 0.243740707755 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125445513603 0.0831039109588 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.18345526049 0.0758088955206 242% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265185740785 0.150359130593 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173373069842 0.0667264976115 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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