Some think that governments should support retired people financially while others believe they should take care of themselves.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion
It is argued by some that retired people should be supported financially by the governments while others claim that during their working years, individuals should save a fund for their retirement. While I believe that there are some benefits to taking care of their owns, I would say that a financial fund should be supported by the governments.
On the one hand, some people think individuals should save the money for their senior time because of a great amount of money. To be more specific, In some developed countries such as Japan, Germany, Italia there are all elderly population then if senior citizens are supported by the financially fund, the governments will not focus on improving betterment for the youth. As a result, a developed nation could fall and the next generation will be the victims of poverty and backward problem.
On the other hand, it is believed that governments should take care of retired inhabitants due to some moral reasons. First of all, all the senior people had contributed the betterment for the country when they were young. Therefore, a financially assistance should be provided to support their basic living. Secondly, when people get older, their abilities cannot allow them to hard and long working. This means they cannot afford basic needed so a basic financial support should be given by the governments.
In conclusion, It is seems to me that governments should take care of senior citizens by financial money because of moral reasons and healthy abilities and with the view of saving retired fund by themselves would be lost as a result.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1324.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99622641509 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68947290504 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6494591101 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.363636364 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0909090909 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8181818182 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378917755867 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159127271291 0.084324248473 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111529567821 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249791758099 0.151304729494 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889404424248 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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