Your family is going to move to another town Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests

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Your family is going to move to another town.
Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son.
Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am John, dweller of Huston Street Texas U.S.A, penning down this epistle to inquire about the admission of my son named Li in secondary level . Since I am working as a Chief Financial Officer in a renowned transnational firm, so I undergo frequent transfers. Seemingly, I have recently shifted to New York with my family, thus I am skeptical about the admission of my child as admission period has been lapsed.

Initially , i aspire to familiarize you with some outstanding achievements of my son. He has not only performed exceptionally well in academics but also at co-scholastic activities. Gladly, he has passed his matriculation with flying colors and was the captain of this year's winning team in national T-20 cricket tournament.

Further, he has a unique interest in reading books and as a result, he has developed his cognitive competencies up to a great extent. Consequently, I stiffly assure you that he would put his die hard efforts to bring laurel to your academy and would enhance its reputation and prestige.
I am anticipating a positive and prompt response from your side.

Yours sincerely,
John.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, second, so, thus, well, as a result, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 960.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05263157895 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05327408512 2.54303337028 120% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.705263157895 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2445372273 44.8134815571 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3 4.34317383033 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108478627318 0.216113520407 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478601880589 0.0766984524023 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389154896853 0.0603063233224 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0595396612225 0.12726935374 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280842682222 0.0580467560999 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 8.37731958763 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 8.71597938144 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.98 7.59969072165 131% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 41.2886597938 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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