in the reading passage In the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms However there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about pa

Essay topics:

in the reading passage.
In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients’ medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.

Recently, there has been a ton of debate as to the best way to record medical information. More specifically, in regards to the passages, the writer puts forth the idea that there are several advantages in storing patient's medical records in electronic databases. In the listening passage, the lecturer is quick to point out there are some serious flaws in the writer's claims. In fact, the professor believes that those advantages could be very uncertain, and addresses, in detail, the trouble with each point made in the reading text.

First and foremost, the author of the reading states that by recording information electronically, they will be able to reduce costs, because they will not need to store all these paperwork in a physical place and they can also avoid the costs of transferring these records somewhere else. Some professionals in the same field, however, stand in firm opposition to this claim. In the listening, for example. the professor states that the possible cost reduction is very insignificant. She goes on to say that it is very often the case that Doctors still use paper forms as a backup, so in this sense, they will still pay to store all those records.

One group of scholars, represented by the writer, think that electronic record-keeping could prevent mistakes, take illegible handwriting as an example or improper transcriptions. Of course, though not all experts in this field believe this is accurate. Again, the speaker specifically addresses this point when she states that that will not eliminate the possibility of poor handwriting, because doctors still write prescriptions on paper form, and then their assistants are supposed to interpret this information and put it into the computer.

Finally, the author wraps hir argument by positing that this could also aid research, regarding that it will be easier to gather all those amounts of data for further research. Not surprisingly, the lecturer takes issue with this claim by contending that this is not necessarily a benefit. To have access to some information of patients is way more complicated, especially if you take into consideration that in The United States are very strict rules on this matter, due to is supposed to be the patient's wish to share this personal data, so then in order to use this information for research, they first have to ask for permissions and sometimes can be very complicated.

To sum up, both the writer and the professor hold conflicting views about medical records. It is clear that they will have trouble finding common ground on this issue.

Votes
Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
This essay topic by users
Post date Users Rates Link to Content
2023-07-02 Vivian Chang 80 view
2023-07-02 YasamanEsml 80 view
2022-12-14 shekoo20 80 view
2022-12-07 HSNDEK 73 view
2022-09-12 sarah1378 73 view
>>> More users practiced this topic >>>
Essay Categories
Integrated TOEFL Writing

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...medical information. More specifically, in regards to the passages, the writer puts forth the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 175, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this paperwork' or 'these paperworks'?
Suggestion: this paperwork; these paperworks
...because they will not need to store all these paperwork in a physical place and they can also a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...s claim. In the listening, for example. the professor states that the possible cost...
^^^
Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...ly addresses this point when she states that that will not eliminate the possibility of p...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, regarding, so, still, then, as to, for example, in fact, of course, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 22.412803532 205% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 30.3222958057 195% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 1373.03311258 157% => OK
No of words: 426.0 270.72406181 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07276995305 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86080516219 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 145.348785872 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521126760563 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 419.366225166 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 2.5761589404 349% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.8920040564 49.2860985944 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.117647059 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0588235294 21.698381199 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193149254971 0.272083759551 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569549699467 0.0996497079465 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608213384752 0.0662205650399 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107812283959 0.162205337803 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357436718201 0.0443174109184 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 63.6247240618 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Write the essay in 20 minutes.

Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.