There are more advertisements aimed at children. Some people believe that they have negative effects on children and should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?
Recently, there are various advertisements which their targets are children so some people feel that it should be banned. I agree with this view because I think it is necessary to not allow some advertisement to air if it affects badly on watchers, especially children.
To begin, commercials aimed at children can have a detrimental impact since there are specific brands are only for children such as toys, games and so on. Many children are easily manipulated to want things they see in advertisements, and this may cause pressure on their parents by pestering or nagging from children to buy things. Additionally, advertising targeted at children can have negative effects on their health, as many fast food and junk food companies, these days direct their marketing strategies towards children, making their products appear to be tasty and appealing. Most children are easily persuaded to purchase these unhealthy foods, and as a consequence, can be at risk of many serious health issues, such as obesity and diabetes.
In addition to this, some advertisements with inappropriate content may be harmful to the development of children. Young people are innocent and easy to imitate what they have seen, watched and listened to. Hence, messages and ways to show advertisements need to be controlled cautiously. There is no hard to find many cases children tried to mimic the actions of a cartoon character or a hero on TV commercial and put him in danger. Besides, adults should control what their children watch to make sure it is safe and there no disadvantage consequence after.
In conclusion, advertising aimed at children have certain negative impacts regarding children's health and their behaviour but it is not necessary to ban all of the advertisements whom aims are children, just a part of them should be banned if it involves harmfully.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun food seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much fast food', 'a good deal of fast food'.
Suggestion: much fast food; a good deal of fast food
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, hence, if, may, regarding, so, as to, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14851485149 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98391086257 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590759075908 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.3100026596 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.447001126382 0.244688304435 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163101980132 0.084324248473 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918540250443 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29379984993 0.151304729494 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678669706722 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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