It is important for children to spend time outside than spending time in front of a screen, watching TV or playing video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that spending time on outdoor activities is more important for children than watching TV shows or playing computer games. I completely agree with this statement since playing outside has numerous benefits to children's development and wellbeing.
To begin with, taking part in outdoor activities enhances children's physical wellbeing. As growing numbers of children live a sedentary lifestyle, their health conditions get worse. Nowadays, many children suffer from obesity and vision disorder problems because they spend too much time in front of screens instead of engaging in outdoor activities. Therefore, young people must leave their computers and TV's behind and go outside to be more active. For instance, when I was a little girl, I spend my all free time outside playing hence, I was fit and healthy.
Furthermore, children can improve their interpersonal skills by joining outdoor activities. While playing outside children have more chances to have face-to-face interactions with their peers. By this, they will develop communication skills as well as team working skills, which are important for children's development. Therefore, children need to spend less time at home on their phones or computers and play in the outside. I remember, for example, I meet with most of my beloved friends playing hide and seek or hopscotch in our neighbourhood playground, which has a big part of my personal growth.
Inconclusion, taking part in outdoor activities to improve children's physical fitness as well as their social skills. I believe, all children spend more time outside rather than the digital world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1386.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45669291339 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83442693819 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59842519685 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0025509042 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.0 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331256311324 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119168565921 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999711714353 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234637289774 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691887688191 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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