Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, parents are constantly thinking on how their children should dedicate their free time. Thus, they have been pushing them to join certain group activities available in the community and others think that they need to learn by themselves. This essay will analyze both sides and give some perspective of the benefits that children can get.
Firstly, local governments have assigned a big portion of their annual budgets to children’s activities. They have built new facilities where children can join different kinds of activities, such as ballet, music and indoor-football. Therefore, parents need to encourage their children to join these activities where they will have the opportunity to meet other children and get good health.
Secondly, due to the current pandemic crises, children are not allowed to join group activities, therefore parents have been pushing their children to spend their time on home books and the internet to increase their knowledge in certain areas, such as cooking and baking. People do not agree with this, because they believe children need to be in contact with others; however, with the current situation, this would be possible in the near future. Thus, the benefits for that are that they can feel useful and actually, they can start their own business in the future.
In summary, parents need to explore different ways on how to keep their children busy during their free time. It should be either allowing them to join their preference on group activities or allowing them to increase their knowledge by their own using different tools. My point of view is that group activities benefit children in many aspects and help them to meet more people. Thus, governments need to assign a budget to children and create more facilities for joint activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...start their own business in the future. In summary, parents need to explore diff...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19863013699 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58417132799 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510273972603 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3647744273 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.769230769 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389277033722 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159664286 0.084324248473 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101945811807 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266302095379 0.151304729494 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566980086161 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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