Some people believe that young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, an increase in crime has become the subject of heated debate. young people who commit offences should be treated differently from adults who perpetrate the same crimes, while others argue otherwise. And I wholeheartedly agree with the former stand. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that juvenile delinquents should be penalized as harshly as adults do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that youngsters need to learn that their actions have consequences and they also need to learn that illegal behaviour will not be tolerated. To provide a hypothetical example, if other impressionable people witnessed their peers receiving punishment for unlawful activities, they would be less likely to perpetrate crimes that may lead them to be incarcerated in jail. This means that harsh punishment could act as a deterrent. Given these points, some people hold the view that punishing young criminals in the same way as adults is necessary.
My opinion, however, is that teenage criminals should not receive the same penalties as adult criminals. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that the youth are generally less able to distinguish between right and wrong than adults. Thus, obliging young criminals to take the same responsibility for their crimes as adult is unfair. Another convincing reason is that adolescents should deserve to have a chance to change and become law-abiding citizens. If they are punished severely, then this opportunity might be lost and they might enter into a life of crime, which exerts a detrimental influence on our society. Therefore, other methods as punishment, such as vocational training and community service, should be imposed on young offenders in order to help them reintegrate back into society. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that depriving youngsters of opportunities to reflect on their crimes by inflicting the same punishment on them as adults should be discouraged for the reasons discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28099173554 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88993977957 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584022038567 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6686274171 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326770067949 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899053869643 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886755104842 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195684357366 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632751444269 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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