In this technological era, personal information is held on computers by many companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In this day and age, it is so common for many enterprises and organisations to keep their customer data online. Although this activity can be immensely beneficial for both customers and manufacturers, the drawbacks seem to be more since it can have many negative impacts on the society
On the one hand, companies can utilize your data in order not to only increase their revenue but also facilitate the experiences of their clients. In more detail, thanks to technology, entrepreneurs can analyse their customer’s databases to figure out and promote the products that suit them best, which is of tremendous convenience for everyone. In addition, when it comes to making transactions, it is just only a matter of seconds, ultimately saving time and effort for users since all of their information to sign in has already been saved. They even do not have to leave their house, which is especially helpful in this pandemic
On the other hand, many people are afraid of the security of their information when letting some strangers control their private data. There is evidence that many organizations try to commercialize their customer’s information by selling them to a third party, which is obviously unethical. Moreover, their sensitive information can be potentially leaked out and in worsen scenarios, if fallen into the wrong hands, their money can be illegally withdrawn from their bank’s accounts or their lives will be totally distracted. For instance, if a burglar has your work schedule, he can ultimately break into your house when you are leaving for work
To conclude, is it undoubtedly that the storage of personal data on company’s computers is really useful and time-saving. However, the advantages are dwarfed by substantial disadvantages, regarding the dangerous situations people have to cope with when their information is not secured
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...your house when you are leaving for work To conclude, is it undoubtedly that the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, really, regarding, second, so, third, for instance, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26755852843 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00803352364 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585284280936 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8019180339 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.0 106.682146367 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2222222222 20.7667163134 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8888888889 7.06120827912 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12625144562 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602835349467 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361979405423 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0899584085175 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033040005358 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 9.78957915832 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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