Q11 : Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Recently, the conservation of animals has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that dealing with contemporary issues of humans should take precedence over preserving animals, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that mankind should not allow animals to go extinct do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that preventing animals from disappearing plays a vital role in keeping biodiversity that is invaluable. In addition, to provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for making an effort to save animals, the food chain and ecosystem would be broken due to the extinction of a myriad of endangered species of wildlife, which exerts a detrimental influence on human beings who are on the top of the food chain.
My opinion, however, is that in modern society, there are a number of global issues which more emphasis should be placed on than hindering animals from dying out given that the protection of animals is not directly related to people's daily life. Perhaps the most pressing problem is global warming as a multitude of citizens across the globe suffer from the impact of global warming that can even lead to climate change, causing harm to the quality of people's life. Another grave issue is global hunger that is directly related to the life of humans. As a brief illustration, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, approximately 17% of the world's population died due to poverty in 2010. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that protecting animals should not be a priority for the reasons discussed above.
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Suggestion:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03692307692 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7757188951 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606153846154 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.7280863215 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.928571429 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307453405939 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836650348771 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664109179593 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160605709079 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236346994214 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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