In order to attract more viewers and for monetary reasons, the time devoted to weather and local news should be kept like that of the former level.
The business manager's argument that, in order to attract more viewers and for monetary reasons, the time devoted to weather and local news should be kept like that of the former level is logically not convincing due to the following reasons.
First, the business manager did not explain the reason for the increased time devoted to the national news in the late-night news program. Why was there a shift in the content? Is it because the people are interested to watch the national news? Why did they decrease the time allotted for the weather and local news? Are there serious reasons behind that?
Second, the complaints in the last one year from the viewers are in relation to the weather and local news. Is it because of the less time devoted to the weather and local news or some other reason? Probably, the weather reports or local news are reported inaccurately or partially and as a result the viewers are complaining. The percentage of the viewers are not mentioned. Are all the viewers complaining about the weather and local news? Perhaps, the viewers are farmers, who need to know the details of the changes in weather. It is not mentioned that the viewers are reducing. The complaint is only about the content. May be the one who presents the news is not presenting it properly too. Thus, reasons should be noted of.
Third, the local businesses that used to advertise during the late-night news program have cancelled their advertising contracts. The business manager should find out the real reason. Is it because they are not happy with the content of the news program? Are there any links between the less time devoted to the weather and local news with the cancellation by the local businesses? Those businesses may not be happy with the entire program as such. Probably they have found another program where they can advertise and can get more viewers. That may have no relation with the less time devoted to the weather and local news.
Thus based on the above reasons, the business manager should seriously think of his argument and find the real reasons behind the problems of the late-night news program.
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| 2021-09-06 | JINZON MATHEW | 65 | view |
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1725 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.713 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.349 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.806 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.343 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
The business managers argument that, in order to attract more...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 628, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...omplaint is only about the content. May be the one who presents the news is not pr...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, third, thus, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8306010929 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41683308203 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.42349726776 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7528358669 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6666666667 119.503703932 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 5.70786347227 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508108448193 0.218282227539 233% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138826420991 0.0743258471296 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127674533484 0.0701772020484 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299780627201 0.128457276422 233% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17680969537 0.0628817314937 281% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 14.3799401198 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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