Task 2. Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.
Why do you think this is the case?
What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?
There is no skepticism about the topic of adolescent’s communications which deserved some analyses in recent days. According to this writer’s perspective, there are two key factors attribute to the issue: Approaching social media at an early age and consequences of negative movies. However, parents' interference and sympathetic conversations might tackle the issue.
In this high-tech era, children are capable of associating technology too early which exaggerates their communication abilities. Children these days are promoted and approached to diverse type virtual activities such as: online class, online games, youtube video, etc. Those apps and services provide them information which they should explore themselves in reality rather than on the internet. In that way, at the teenage age, these people are already equipped with enough details and experience which makes them less concerned about communicating with others physically. For instance, if teenagers watch excessive youtube videos about self-completion, they might separate themselves from the others because they probably think that they already perform well.
Moreover, negative effects and ominous scenes on the TV or the Internet also ruin their desire for physical communication. In recent days, there are various movies and series which are poisonous for children's perspective by exploiting the dark side of the issue. The ominous senses of the series can be explained as the violent and bloody scenes. The adolescents' mental health is so fragile that it can be easily stimulated and vulnerable. In terms of watching these types of programs or series, they might construct an illogical perspective and compel themselves to follow those harmful rules. Typical example is that the topic of friendship these days is normally dug up as the unfavorable side which might force children to build up excessive defense. Therefore, ominous TV series or programs are considered as the serious factors.
However, parent’s interference and sympathetic conversations with their kid are capable of tackling the issue. All the analyses proved that the inappropriate method of using internet or media devices exaggerate their communication skills, but parents ought to control the amount of time their kid gets access to those devices. In addition, parents should be active in encouraging the child to create more meaningful relationships rather than virtual friends. Remarkably, any comment must be soft and compassionate in order to prevent teenagers from constructing repellent notions.
To conclude, focusing on the virtual world is the unnoticeable issue due to two reasons: approaching social media at an early age and consequences of negative movies. Fortunately, parents' interference and sympathetic conversations might arrive as the solutions.
- The charts below show the types of work occupied by people from Province A and Province B in England 84
- Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crimes To what extent do you agree 89
- Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home To what extent do you agree or disagree 84
- Around the world many adults are working from home and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible Do you think this is a positive or negative development 73
- Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2411.0 1615.20841683 149% => OK
No of words: 421.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72684085511 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05985818286 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558194774347 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 506.74238477 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0923481693 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.80952381 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0476190476 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 7.06120827912 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0776265249621 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0216211196054 0.084324248473 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0241492993999 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0377343489508 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295690087848 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.95 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 78.4519038076 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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